Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-08-11
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
THE TABLE ILLUSTRATES THE INFORMATION ABOUT NUMBER OF VISITERS VISIT ASHDOWN MUSEUM BEFORE RENOVATED AND AFTER IT WAS AND ALSO GIVE DATAILS HOW THEY SATISFIED DURING SAME PERIODS.
OVERALL, THE FIGURE OF VISITORS INCREASED AFTER REFURBISHED THE MUSEUM. WHEREAS, MOST NUMBER OF PEOPLE DISSATISFIED BEFORE RECONSTRUCT IT AND AFTER THE RENOVATION, PEOPLE GOT SATISFIED.
ACCORDING TO THE TABLE, THERE WERE 74,000 VISITORS VISIT THE MUSEUM BEFORE REFURBISHED IT AND 40% PEOPLE DISSATISFIED. HOWEVER ONLY 30% PEOPLE SATISFIED DURING SAME PERIOD. IN ADDITION, 15% VISITORS VERY SATISFIED WHEREAS 10% PEOPLE VERY DISSATIDFIED. WHILE, 5% PEOPLE DID NOT GIVE ANY RESPONSE.
HOWEVER, THE NUMBER OF VISITORS INCREASED AFTER RENOVATION THE MESUEM AND FIGURE WAS 92000.THERE WERE 40% PEOPLE SATISFIED AFTER REFURBISHED. WHILE 35% VISITORS VERY SATISFIED HOWEVER ONLY 5% INDIVIDUALS VERY DISSATISFIED WHERE 5% VISITORS NOT GIVE ANY RESPONSE. HOWEVER MOST NUMBER OF PEOPLE VISIT THE MESUEM AFTER REFURBISHED AND ALSO GAVE GOOD RESPONSE.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers the main features of the data, including the visitor numbers and the satisfaction levels for both periods. However, the analysis is somewhat mechanical and lacks a clear, analytical overview. While the key figures are identified, the comparison between the two periods could be more effectively synthesized. For instance, the transition from 'dissatisfied' to 'satisfied' is noted, but the specific shifts in the 'very satisfied' and 'very dissatisfied' categories are presented as a list of figures rather than a cohesive comparison. To improve, focus on grouping the data to highlight the most significant trends rather than reporting every figure individually.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organized into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is often repetitive or slightly unnatural, such as the frequent use of 'however' and 'while' at the start of sentences. Some transitions feel forced, and the logical progression between sentences is occasionally hindered by awkward phrasing. The referencing is generally clear, but the overall flow would benefit from a more varied range of linking words and better integration of the data points within the sentences to create a smoother narrative.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is adequate for the task but remains quite basic and repetitive. There are several instances of word-choice errors and awkward collocations, such as 'before renovated' instead of 'before the renovation' and 'people got satisfied' instead of 'visitors reported higher satisfaction'. The range of vocabulary is limited, relying heavily on the words provided in the prompt. To reach a higher band, you should aim to use more precise terminology related to data description, such as 'experienced a rise', 'a significant shift', or 'the proportion of visitors'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede the flow of reading. There are consistent issues with verb tenses and word forms, such as 'before renovated' and 'after reconstruction it'. Additionally, there are errors in sentence structure, including missing articles and incorrect preposition usage. While the meaning is generally clear, the lack of control over complex sentence structures and the persistence of basic errors in subject-verb agreement and word order limit the score. Focusing on proofreading for basic grammatical accuracy would significantly improve the clarity of your writing.
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