Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-08-11
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The given pie chart illustrates the amount of tourists to Ashdown Museum while the year before and after it was refurbished. it can be seen that the out come of surveys asking attendees about their satisfactory visit, during the same two periods.
overall, The number of visitor are increased after refurbished. and their result are nearby by very dissatisfied in both, before and after.
Firstly, in terns of the Year before refurbishment's had 74,000 visitors, the traveler's result are 15 with very satisfied. following that, satisfied effect can be seen by double from above. after that, it's dissatisfied impact are 40. furthermore, very dissatisfied account has 10. while, half of them gave no response.
secondly, the result of a Year after refurbishment is almost opposite from before one. it has 92.000 travelers. here is 35 responses are very satisfied. by following that, 40 out comes are positive of satisfied. moreover, dissatisfied impacts are showing with 15 surveys. meanwhile, very dissatisfied and no response remain same at 5.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response addresses the task by summarizing the main features of the table and charts. However, the data reporting is often inaccurate or confusing. For example, you state that 'half of them gave no response' for the year before, but the chart shows 5% for 'no response'. Additionally, the description of the survey results is unclear, and the comparison between the two years lacks precision. While you identify the increase in visitor numbers, the analysis of the satisfaction levels is hampered by misinterpretation of the data points. To improve, ensure you accurately transcribe figures and focus on clear, comparative language rather than just listing numbers.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organized into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or misused, such as 'following that' and 'after that' used repeatedly. The transition between sentences is sometimes abrupt, and the logical flow is hindered by grammatical errors. While there is an attempt at an overview, the connection between the data points is weak. To reach a higher band, focus on using a wider variety of linking words and ensure that each paragraph has a clear, unified focus that logically progresses from the previous one.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is limited and often repetitive. You rely on basic terms like 'result', 'impact', and 'amount', which are sometimes used incorrectly in context (e.g., 'satisfied effect' or 'dissatisfied impact'). There are also issues with word choice, such as using 'amount' for countable visitors instead of 'number'. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to convey the data with precision. To improve, you should learn topic-specific collocations related to data description, such as 'a significant rise', 'a notable decline', or 'the proportion of visitors'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text that occasionally impede communication. Issues include subject-verb agreement ('The number of visitor are increased'), incorrect article usage, and awkward sentence structures ('in terns of the Year before refurbishment's had'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, with unnecessary capitalization and misuse of periods. The range of structures is limited, consisting mostly of simple sentences with errors. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, subject-verb agreement, and the correct use of articles before attempting more complex grammatical structures.
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