Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-08-11
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished.
total numbers of visitors to Ashdown museum.
during the year before refurbishment the visitors to Ashdown were 74000 and during the year after refurbishment the visitors to Ashdown were 92000.
results of surveys of visitors satisfaction.
year before refurbishment , the very satisfied visitors to Ashdown museum is around 15% and satisfied visitors is around 40%.
dissatisfied visitors to Ashdown museum were 40% and very dissatisfied visitors to Ashdown museum were 10% and with the no response visitors to Ashdown museum 5%.
Year after refurbishment.
the very satisfied visitors to Ashdown museum is around 35% and satisfied visitors to Ashdown museum is 40%, and dissatisfied visitors to Ashdown museum were 15% and very dissatisfied visitors to Ashdown is 5% and the no response visitors to Ashdown museum were 5%.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response addresses the main features of the data, such as the increase in visitor numbers and the shift in satisfaction levels. However, the presentation is fragmented and lacks a cohesive overview or a clear introduction. The response reads more like a list of bullet points than a structured report. While the key figures are identified, the comparison between the two periods is underdeveloped. To improve, you should group the information into logical paragraphs—one for the visitor numbers and one for the survey results—and provide a summary statement that highlights the overall trend, such as the correlation between the refurbishment and increased visitor satisfaction.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The text lacks a logical structure. It is divided into short, disjointed segments that function more like headings than paragraphs. There is a lack of cohesive devices (such as 'however', 'in contrast', or 'furthermore') to link ideas together, making the flow mechanical and repetitive. The use of referencing is also weak, as the same phrases (e.g., 'visitors to Ashdown museum') are repeated excessively. To reach a higher band, you must use linking words to connect sentences and organize your report into clear, well-developed paragraphs that guide the reader through the data.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is quite limited and repetitive. You rely heavily on basic phrases like 'visitors to Ashdown museum' and 'is around'. There is little attempt to use a range of vocabulary to describe trends or data points, such as 'experienced a rise', 'a significant proportion', or 'the majority'. The lack of variety makes the writing feel monotonous. To improve, try to use synonyms and more precise language to describe the data, such as 'the figure rose to' or 'the proportion of satisfied visitors increased significantly'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The grammar is basic and contains several errors. There is a lack of complex sentence structures, and the punctuation is inconsistent, particularly with the use of commas and capitalization. For example, 'the very satisfied visitors... is around 15%' should be 'the percentage of very satisfied visitors was around 15%'. Additionally, there is a lack of subject-verb agreement and inconsistent tense usage. To improve, focus on using a mix of simple and complex sentences and ensure that your verb tenses are consistent when describing past data.
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