Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-08-11
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The pie chart indicates that the number of visitors satisfaction while visiting to Ashdown Museum during the year before refurbishment and Year after refurbishment.
As the chart shows that the year before refurbishment visitors were visited is about 74000. While doing survey about visitors satisfaction by asking them directly, the survey says that 40% of visitors are dissatisfied while 30% of visitors are satisfied. Similarly, the year after refurbishment visitors are about 92000, which is gradually increased. And there is a huge change in visitors reaction, as the survey shows that 40% of visitors are satisfied and only 15% of people are dissatisfied, which tends to drastic changes that we can see through visitors reviews.
In conclusion , it is proved that after refurbishment the satisfaction of the visitors changed and the satisfaction level is marginally rose which is the positive results for the Ashdown Museum, as it is very populater travel spot for all visitors around the world.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers the main features of the data, including visitor numbers and satisfaction levels. However, the analysis is somewhat superficial. While you mention the increase in visitor numbers and the shift in satisfaction, you fail to report the 'very satisfied' or 'neutral' categories, which are key components of the charts. The summary lacks a clear overview of the most significant trends, and the reporting of data is occasionally imprecise (e.g., 'about 74000'). To improve, ensure you select and compare all key data points rather than focusing on only two categories, and provide a more comprehensive overview in the introduction.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The response is organized into three paragraphs, which is a standard structure. However, the logical progression is hindered by awkward phrasing and repetitive sentence starters. Cohesive devices are used, but they are sometimes mechanical or misused, such as 'which tends to drastic changes' and 'it is proved that'. The transition between the visitor numbers and the satisfaction survey results is abrupt. To improve, focus on using a wider variety of linking words (e.g., 'conversely', 'in contrast', 'furthermore') and ensure that each sentence flows naturally from the previous one to create a more cohesive narrative.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is adequate for the task but lacks the precision and range required for a higher band. There are several instances of awkward word choice and non-standard collocations, such as 'visitors satisfaction while visiting to', 'visitors were visited', and 'populater travel spot'. The term 'drastic changes' is used, but the context is slightly unclear. To achieve a higher score, focus on using more precise academic vocabulary and correct collocations. Avoid repeating the same words and try to incorporate more sophisticated descriptors for trends and data points.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. Examples include subject-verb agreement issues ('satisfaction is marginally rose'), incorrect preposition usage ('visiting to'), and awkward phrasing ('the survey says that'). Punctuation is generally functional, but the sentence structure is often clunky. To improve, focus on mastering basic subject-verb agreement and the correct use of passive voice, which is essential for describing data in Task 1. Proofreading for common errors like 'is/are' confusion will significantly improve your accuracy.
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