Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-08-11

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The chart shows the results of survey asking 74,000 visitors visit Ashdown Museum before it was renewed and 92,000 visited after the renovation that how much they are satisfied with the visit.

First of all, By comparing both charts it reveals that there is huge contradiction between the satisfied and unsatisfied people.

In the year before 40% of people are unsatisfied with the museum while in the later year this percentage is converted into satisfied people whilst only 15% of visitors remain unsatisfied in the later year.There is also a huge comparison between the average of very satisfied visitors in both charts it shows a handsome number of 35% after reconstruction whilst In contrast it shows only 15% visitors were very satisfied in the years before refurbishment.

In contrary, the average of people who did not respond to this survey was remained same in both time periods whilst the very unsatisfied visitors percentage remains the half of the that in the previous years

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

You have successfully identified the main features of the data, such as the increase in visitor numbers and the shift in satisfaction levels. However, the response lacks a clear overview or summary paragraph that synthesises the trends. While you mention specific percentages, the analysis is somewhat repetitive and lacks a cohesive structure to compare the two periods effectively. To improve, ensure you group your data logically—for example, by comparing the 'satisfied' categories versus the 'unsatisfied' categories across both years, rather than listing figures in a way that feels disjointed. The inclusion of the visitor numbers is good, but ensure the connection between visitor satisfaction and the refurbishment is explicitly stated.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The response is organised into paragraphs, but the logical flow between sentences is often mechanical. You rely on basic transitions like 'First of all' and 'In contrary', which are sometimes used incorrectly or inappropriately for a data report. The referencing is occasionally unclear; for instance, phrases like 'this percentage is converted' are confusing because percentages do not literally convert into people. To reach a higher band, focus on using a wider range of cohesive devices (e.g., 'consequently', 'in contrast', 'whereas') and ensure that your paragraphs follow a clear, logical progression from general trends to specific supporting details.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

Your vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, but it lacks the precision required for a higher band. You use some informal or inaccurate phrasing, such as 'handsome number' and 'renewed' (instead of 'refurbished' or 'renovated'). There is also some awkward word choice, such as 'huge contradiction' when describing satisfaction levels, which is not the correct term for statistical data. To improve, focus on using more academic collocations and precise terminology related to data description, such as 'significant increase', 'proportion', and 'remained stable'.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. Examples include 'the result of survey asking' (missing article), 'the average of people... was remained same' (incorrect passive voice), and 'the half of the that' (redundant 'the'). These errors are noticeable and occur throughout the text. To improve, focus on subject-verb agreement and the correct use of articles. Additionally, try to vary your sentence structure by using more complex clauses, but ensure they are grammatically sound to avoid confusion.

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