Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-08-12
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The table shows the number of visitors visit the ashdown museum before and after it was refurbished, while the charts show the result of visitors to ask for their feedback during surveys in same both periods.
Overall, the highest number of visitors dissatisfied with before refurbishment of museum, while the most visitors satisfied with after refurbishment. Visitors number are increased after redevelopment.
The 40 people are most unsatisfied before museum refurbishment, However it was changed after refurbishment and people are most satisfied with it. 10 people are very dissatisfied with old museum but it number decreased after renovation. people who did not give response their number remained same.
The 15 people are very satisfied before renovation, while it was increased and 35 after reconstructed. During the period before refurbishment people number was 74,000, which
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, which significantly impacts the task achievement score. While you have attempted to identify some main features, the report is incomplete and ends abruptly mid-sentence. You have failed to provide a full summary of the data, particularly regarding the visitor numbers and the survey results. To improve, ensure you cover all parts of the prompt, including a clear overview and detailed comparisons of the data points provided in both the table and the charts. The current response is too brief to adequately address the task requirements.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The response is organized into paragraphs, but the logical progression is hindered by the incomplete nature of the text. Cohesive devices are used, such as 'Overall' and 'However', but they are sometimes used incorrectly or in a repetitive manner. The referencing is occasionally unclear, and the lack of a complete conclusion or final summary makes the overall structure feel disjointed. To improve, focus on using a wider variety of linking words to connect ideas more fluidly and ensure that each paragraph has a clear, completed focus that contributes to the overall summary.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is quite limited and repetitive. You rely on basic terms like 'people', 'number', and 'satisfied'. There is little attempt to use more sophisticated or precise vocabulary related to data interpretation, such as 'proportion', 'percentage', 'fluctuation', or 'trend'. Furthermore, there are errors in word choice, such as 'visitors visit' and 'people number', which sound unnatural. To reach a higher band, you should incorporate a broader range of academic vocabulary and ensure that your word choices are accurate and appropriate for a formal report.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The grammar is characterized by frequent errors that occasionally impede the flow of the text. There are issues with subject-verb agreement, such as 'Visitors number are increased', and incorrect sentence structures, such as 'the highest number of visitors dissatisfied with before refurbishment'. The use of articles and prepositions is also inconsistent. While you have attempted some complex structures, they are often faulty. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, ensuring correct verb tenses, and practicing the accurate use of articles and prepositions in a formal context.
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