Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-08-13

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

The tabel below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before after its was refurbished. As per chart it shows the result that surveys of vistor satisfaction. during the year before refurbishment was dissatisfied 40% to 30 % and satisified 10% vistoers like 15% after that no response was 5% total number of visitor was 74,000. According to chart they not like much not giving any internet

on the other hand year after during refurbishment total number of people was 92,000 and according to chart shows they were satisfied 40% to 35% other side dislike was 5% to 15% and no response was 5%.

in my opinion as per both chart after year is much improved and people like the work. before was not apprisated

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement, which significantly impacts the score. While you identify the total visitor numbers and some satisfaction percentages, the analysis is fragmented and lacks a clear overview. You have not effectively selected the main features or made meaningful comparisons between the two periods. Furthermore, the inclusion of personal opinion ('in my opinion') is inappropriate for an Academic Task 1 report, which requires an objective summary of the data provided. To improve, focus on describing the trends and differences clearly without adding subjective commentary, and ensure you reach the 150-word minimum to fully develop your points.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.5

The essay lacks a logical structure. While there are paragraph breaks, the flow of information is disjointed, making it difficult for the reader to follow the comparison. Cohesive devices are largely absent or misused, such as 'on the other hand' and 'as per both chart', which do not effectively link ideas. The referencing is often unclear, and the progression of information is not logical. To improve, use clear transition signals to connect your sentences and ensure each paragraph has a clear focus, such as one for visitor numbers and another for satisfaction levels.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The vocabulary is very limited and repetitive. You rely on basic terms like 'show', 'like', and 'work', which are insufficient for a formal report. There are also several spelling errors ('tabel', 'vistor', 'apprisated') and word choice issues, such as 'not giving any internet' and 'not apprisated', which impede clarity. To reach a higher band, you need to use a wider range of vocabulary related to data description, such as 'increased', 'decreased', 'proportion', and 'significant', and ensure your spelling is accurate.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The response contains frequent grammatical errors that often obscure the meaning. There are issues with subject-verb agreement ('total number of visitor was'), sentence fragments ('As per chart it shows...'), and incorrect preposition usage. The sentence structures are simple and often lack proper punctuation, which makes the text difficult to read. There is no evidence of complex sentence structures. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, ensuring subjects and verbs agree, and using articles and prepositions correctly before attempting more complex grammatical forms.

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