Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-08-13
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The table below shows the number of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and after it was refurbished. As per Charts it shows the result of surveys of visitor satisfaction. During the year before refurbishment visitors were dissatisfied 40% to 30 % and satisfied 10% visitors like 15% after that no response was 5% total number of visitors was 74,000. According to charts they did like much not giving any internet
On the other hand the after during refurbishment total number of people was 92,000 and according to chart shows they were satisfied 40% to 35% other side dislike was 5% to 15% and no response was 5%.
in my opinion as per both charts after year is much improved and people like the work. before was not appreciated.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, which significantly impacts the score. While you have identified some data points, the summary is incomplete and lacks a clear overview of the main trends. The description of the survey data is confusing and inaccurate, failing to clearly distinguish between the categories of satisfaction. Furthermore, the inclusion of personal opinion ('in my opinion') is inappropriate for an Academic Task 1 report, which requires an objective summary of the provided data. To improve, ensure you cover all key features of the charts and table without adding subjective commentary, and ensure you meet the minimum length requirement to allow for full development of your points.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The response is organised into paragraphs, but the progression of ideas is unclear. The use of cohesive devices is very limited and often mechanical or misused, such as the awkward transition 'On the other hand the after during refurbishment'. The referencing is frequently confusing, making it difficult for the reader to follow which data points belong to which period. To improve, use a wider range of linking words and ensure that each paragraph has a clear focus. Ensure that your sentences flow logically from one to the next, rather than listing data points in a disjointed manner.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is very basic and repetitive, which limits your ability to describe the data precisely. There are several instances of word-choice errors and awkward phrasing, such as 'they did like much not giving any internet' and 'after year is much improved'. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to describe trends or comparisons effectively. To improve, focus on learning specific collocations for describing data, such as 'a significant increase', 'remained stable', or 'a marked improvement'. Avoid using informal language or vague terms when describing statistical information.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that often impede communication. Sentence structures are simple and often fragmented, such as 'During the year before refurbishment visitors were dissatisfied 40% to 30 % and satisfied 10% visitors like 15%'. There are issues with subject-verb agreement, missing articles, and incorrect preposition usage. The lack of complex sentence structures prevents you from demonstrating a higher level of grammatical control. To improve, focus on constructing complete, grammatically correct sentences and practice using a variety of structures, including complex sentences with subordinate clauses, while ensuring accuracy in basic grammar.
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