Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-08-14

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The total number of visitors to Ashdown Museum are given in table including the visitors before and after refurbishment.Besides this there are two pie charts reflecting the results of visitors satisfaction.

Overall, there is a huge number of dissatisfied proportion of visitors before renovation.On the other hand after the refurbishment, the number of very dissatisfied visitors are more.In addition to this, there is extremely less proportion of no response visitors before and after refurbishment.

First of all there are 15 percent of very satisfied visitors before renovation and 35 percent after renovation showing the difference of 20 percent. After that 30 percent people before refurbishment and 40 percent after refurbishment were satisfied reflecting the difference of 10 percent.It means 10 percent people were satisfied after the refurbishment.

Besides this there is a huge difference of dissatisfied visitors before and after refurbishment reflecting 25 percent more before repairing.Moreover there were also the very dissatisfied visitors that clearly indicate the difference of 5 percent before and after.

Finally the very less number of people including 5 percent on both sides were same having no response.

In a nutshell, there are more dissatisfied visitors proportion before the refurbishment of museum , while the number of satisfied are more after improvement.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The response covers the main features of the data, but the analysis is somewhat superficial. While you correctly identify the increase in satisfaction levels, the report lacks a clear integration of the visitor numbers from the table. You mention the table in the introduction but fail to provide the specific data points (74,000 to 92,000) in the body paragraphs. Furthermore, the comparison of percentages is occasionally confusing, such as the statement '25 percent more before repairing,' which is mathematically unclear. To improve, ensure all data sets are explicitly referenced and comparisons are stated with greater precision.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The essay is organised into paragraphs, which is a positive step. However, the logical progression is hindered by repetitive phrasing and somewhat mechanical use of cohesive devices. Phrases like 'First of all,' 'After that,' and 'Besides this' are used in a way that feels like a list rather than a cohesive analysis. The referencing is sometimes unclear, particularly when discussing the survey results, making it difficult for the reader to follow the comparison between the two periods. Using a wider variety of linking words and improving the flow between sentences would enhance the overall coherence.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task but lacks the precision required for a higher band. You rely on basic descriptors like 'huge number' and 'extremely less,' which are not ideal for academic reporting. There are also some awkward collocations, such as 'dissatisfied proportion of visitors' and 'no response visitors.' To reach a higher band, you should incorporate more precise academic vocabulary related to data trends, such as 'a significant increase,' 'a notable decline,' or 'the proportion of respondents.'

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text that occasionally impede clarity. Examples include subject-verb agreement issues ('The total number of visitors... are given,' 'the number of very dissatisfied visitors are more') and awkward phrasing ('there are more dissatisfied visitors proportion'). While you attempt some complex structures, they are often marred by errors. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with missing spaces after periods in several instances. Focusing on basic subject-verb agreement and ensuring correct sentence structure will significantly improve the accuracy of your writing.

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