Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-08-14
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
This pie chart illustrate the comparison between the number of visitors before and after the refurbishment of the Ashdown Museum. Overall, very satisfied experience significant increase and level of satisfied improved constantly. Whereas, the dissatisfied experience decline, follow by very dissatisfied and no response remain same.
During the year before refurbishment 74,000 number of visitors visit museum. Which continuously rise 92,000 year after refurbishment. Approximately 18,000 visitors increase after year. In terms of very satisfied experiences was 15% before which they
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response is significantly under the 150-word minimum requirement, which severely impacts the task achievement. Because the essay is incomplete and cuts off mid-sentence, it fails to provide a full overview or report all the main features of the data. While the introduction attempts to identify the main trends, the lack of development and the failure to complete the summary means the task is only partially addressed. To improve, you must ensure you complete the analysis of all data points provided in the charts and meet the minimum word count to allow for a full development of your ideas.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The response shows some attempt at logical organization by starting with an overview, but the abrupt ending makes it difficult to assess the overall progression. Cohesive devices are used in a very limited and sometimes mechanical way, such as 'Whereas' and 'During the year'. The paragraphing is insufficient, as the text is too short to demonstrate a clear structure. To improve, focus on using a wider range of linking words to connect your ideas more fluidly and ensure that each paragraph has a clear purpose, leading to a logical flow of information throughout the entire report.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is quite basic and repetitive. Phrases like 'very satisfied experience' and 'number of visitors' are used, but there is little evidence of a range of vocabulary suitable for describing data trends. There are also errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'satisfied improved constantly' instead of 'satisfaction levels improved steadily'. To improve, you should learn specific vocabulary for describing trends, such as 'significant increase', 'steady growth', or 'a marked decline', and practice using these in context to describe the museum data more precisely.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains several grammatical errors that hinder clarity. For example, 'This pie chart illustrate' should be 'illustrates' (subject-verb agreement), and 'Which continuously rise' is a sentence fragment. There is a lack of complex sentence structures, and the existing sentences are often poorly constructed. To improve, focus on basic grammatical accuracy, particularly subject-verb agreement and tense consistency. Once you have mastered these, work on incorporating complex structures like relative clauses or passive voice, which are essential for describing data in an academic context.
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