Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-08-14
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The given table, and pie charts illustrates the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the years before and the year after it was refurbished. Also, depicts the result of survey asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visiting, during the same periods.
From an overall perspective, it is clear that in table chart, total number of people maximums visited during the year after refurbishment. while, in pie chart, in result of surveys maximum visitors' satisfaction in very dissatisfied as well as in very satisfied.
To begin with, in table chart, highest number of people visited in Ashdown Museum only during the year after refurbishment that is about 92,000 visitors, after that people visited during the year before refurbishment that is around 74,000 visitors.
Moving further, in results of survey of visitors' satisfaction, In year before refurbishment, highest number of people feel dissatisfied about 40 visitors, after that year dissatisfaction level of people decreased by 35% that is around 15 visitors. Year before refurbishment people feel very satisfied with this survey that consist of 30 visitors, then after year it increased by 10% that is roughly 40 visitors. year after very satisfied level maximum number of people feel very satisfied that is about 35 visitors, but in before year it declined by 15 visitors. rest of the categories almost remained same result of satisfaction level nearly 10 visitors very satisfied and 5 visitors do not give any response.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response covers the main features of the table and charts, but the analysis is often unclear or inaccurate. For instance, the description of the survey results is confusing, as you mention '40 visitors' when the data likely represents percentages or a different scale. The comparison between the two years is attempted, but the lack of clarity in interpreting the data prevents a higher score. To improve, ensure you clearly distinguish between the total visitor numbers and the satisfaction percentages, and focus on reporting the most significant trends rather than listing every minor detail.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organised into paragraphs, which is a positive step. However, the logical progression is frequently interrupted by awkward phrasing and unclear referencing. Cohesive devices are used, such as 'To begin with' and 'Moving further', but they are often followed by sentences that are difficult to follow. The connection between the data points is weak, making it hard for the reader to track the comparison between the 'before' and 'after' periods. Improving the use of linking words and ensuring each sentence flows logically from the previous one will enhance the coherence of your writing.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is quite limited and repetitive. You rely heavily on basic terms like 'number of people', 'visited', and 'result'. There are also issues with word choice and collocation, such as 'maximums visited' and 'before year', which are not standard English. To achieve a higher band, you should aim to use a wider range of vocabulary to describe trends, such as 'fluctuated', 'remained stable', or 'experienced a significant increase'. Additionally, focus on using more precise terminology when discussing data, such as 'proportion' or 'percentage' instead of just 'number'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text, including issues with subject-verb agreement ('The given table... illustrates'), article usage, and sentence structure. Many sentences are fragmented or lack the necessary complexity to demonstrate a good range of grammar. For example, 'In year before refurbishment, highest number of people feel dissatisfied' contains errors in tense and article usage. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, ensuring consistent verb tenses, and correctly using articles. Practising the formation of complex sentences will also help you move towards a higher band.
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