Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-08-15
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 6.0)
The table displays the number of people who visited Ashdown Museum during the previous year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts illustrate the result of visitor statisfaction during their visit, in the same two periods.
Overall, it is evidence that during the year after refurbishment, the total number of visitors to Ashdown Museum increase sharply compared to the previous year. In addition the majority of people were satisfied after in the year after Ashdown Museum was refurbished.
During the year before refurbishment, the total number of visitors to Ashdown Museum were only stood at 74,000 people, while the result of surveys of visitor statisfaction showed 40 percent of people were felt dissatisfied and 10 percent of people extremely dissatisfied. Although, only 30 percent of those were satisfied and 15 percent of them were very happy. Meanwhile 5 percent of them leave no feedback.
By contrast, after refurbishment, the total visitors increased significantly to 92,000 visitors during this period. In addition, the results of the surveys of statisfaction showed increasing number of people satisfied, by further 10 percent points and 35 percent of them were extremely satisfied. Although there are only 15 percent and 5 percent of people who dissatisfied and very disatisfied, and 5 percent of them remained no response.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 6.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0
Anda telah berhasil mengidentifikasi fitur-fitur utama dari data tersebut, termasuk peningkatan jumlah pengunjung dan perubahan tingkat kepuasan. Anda memberikan gambaran umum yang jelas dan mendukung poin-poin Anda dengan data yang relevan dari tabel dan grafik. Namun, terdapat beberapa ketidakakuratan kecil dalam melaporkan data; misalnya, Anda menyatakan '35 percent of them were extremely satisfied' setelah perbaikan, padahal grafik menunjukkan 40 percent. Selain itu, perbandingan antara kedua periode tersebut bisa lebih tepat. Untuk mencapai band yang lebih tinggi, pastikan semua angka disalin dengan akurat dan hubungan antara kedua kumpulan data dikaitkan secara eksplisit di sepanjang tanggapan Anda.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
Tanggapan ini disusun secara logis ke dalam pendahuluan, gambaran umum, dan dua paragraf isi. Anda menggunakan beberapa perangkat kohesi seperti 'In addition', 'Meanwhile', dan 'By contrast' untuk menghubungkan ide. Namun, penggunaan perangkat ini terkadang terasa mekanis atau sedikit tidak alami, seperti transisi yang kaku 'Although, only 30 percent...'. Pembagian paragraf sudah tepat, tetapi alur antar kalimat dapat ditingkatkan dengan menggunakan variasi kata penghubung yang lebih luas untuk menciptakan narasi yang lebih kohesif. Referensi umumnya jelas, tetapi perkembangan ide secara keseluruhan dapat dibuat lebih lancar untuk memandu pembaca dengan lebih baik melalui perbandingan data.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
Anda menunjukkan rentang kosakata yang memadai untuk tugas ini, dengan menggunakan istilah seperti 'refurbished', 'sharply', dan 'significantly'. Namun, terdapat beberapa kesalahan ejaan, seperti 'statisfaction' (berulang kali) dan 'disatisfied'. Selain itu, ada beberapa masalah pilihan kata, seperti 'it is evidence that' (seharusnya 'it is evident') dan 'leave no feedback' (seharusnya 'left no feedback'). Meskipun kesalahan ini tidak menghambat komunikasi, kesalahan tersebut mencegah tanggapan Anda mencapai band yang lebih tinggi. Fokus pada ejaan yang akurat dan kolokasi yang lebih tepat akan meningkatkan skor Anda secara signifikan dalam kriteria ini.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
Anda menggunakan campuran struktur kalimat sederhana dan kompleks, namun sering terjadi kesalahan tata bahasa. Contohnya termasuk masalah kesesuaian subjek-predikat seperti 'the total number of visitors... were only stood' (seharusnya 'was') dan 'there are only 15 percent... who dissatisfied' (seharusnya 'who were dissatisfied'). Terdapat juga masalah dengan konsistensi tenses, seperti 'people were felt dissatisfied'. Meskipun maknanya secara umum jelas, kesalahan yang terus-menerus dalam tata bahasa dasar dan konstruksi kalimat ini membatasi skor Anda. Untuk meningkatkan kemampuan, fokuslah pada kesesuaian subjek-predikat dan pastikan bentuk kata kerja Anda konsisten di sepanjang laporan.
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