Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-08-15
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 6.5)
The table displays the number of people who visited Ashdown Museum during the previous year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts illustrate the result of visitor satisfaction during their visit, in the same two periods.
Overall, it is evident that during the year after refurbishment, the total number of visitors to Ashdown Museum increased sharply compared to the previous year. In addition the majority of people were satisfied after in the year after Ashdown Museum was refurbished.
During the year before refurbishment, the total number of visitors to Ashdown Museum were stood at 74,000 people, while the result of surveys of visitor satisfaction showed 40 percent of people were felt dissatisfied and 10 percent of people extremely dissatisfied. Although, only 30 percent of those were satisfied and 15 percent of them were very happy. Meanwhile 5 percent of them leave no feedback.
By contrast, after refurbishment, the total visitors increased significantly to 92,000 visitors during this period. In addition, the results of the surveys of satisfaction showed an increasing number of people satisfied, by further 10 percent points, and 35 percent of them were extremely satisfied. Although there are only 15 percent and 5 percent of people who were dissatisfied and very disatisfied, and 5 percent of them remained no response.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 7.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 6.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 6.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5
Anda telah berhasil mengidentifikasi fitur-fitur utama dari data tersebut, termasuk peningkatan jumlah pengunjung dan perubahan tingkat kepuasan. Anda memberikan gambaran umum yang jelas dan mendukung poin-poin Anda dengan data yang relevan dari tabel dan grafik. Untuk mencapai band yang lebih tinggi, pastikan Anda menghindari ketidakakuratan kecil dalam pelaporan data; misalnya, Anda menyatakan '35 percent of them were extremely satisfied' setelah renovasi, padahal grafik menunjukkan 40 percent. Selain itu, pastikan semua perbandingan tepat. Secara keseluruhan, Anda telah mencakup semua bagian tugas dengan baik dan memberikan ringkasan yang logis.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 7.0
Respons Anda disusun secara logis dengan pendahuluan, gambaran umum, dan paragraf isi yang jelas. Anda menggunakan perangkat kohesi seperti 'In addition', 'By contrast', dan 'Meanwhile' untuk menghubungkan ide secara efektif. Pembuatan paragraf digunakan dengan tepat untuk memisahkan dua periode waktu. Perkembangan ide terlihat jelas di seluruh teks. Untuk meningkatkan lebih lanjut, pastikan referensi selalu tepat; misalnya, 'those' di paragraf ketiga sedikit ambigu. Secara keseluruhan, alur informasi lancar dan mudah diikuti.
Lexical Resource — Band 6.0
Anda menunjukkan jangkauan kosakata yang memadai untuk tugas ini, menggunakan istilah seperti 'refurbished', 'significantly', dan 'dissatisfied'. Terdapat beberapa kesalahan kecil dalam pemilihan kata dan kolokasi, seperti 'total visitors increased' (seharusnya 'total number of visitors') dan 'remained no response' (seharusnya 'gave no response'). Meskipun Anda mencoba menggunakan kosakata yang kurang umum, ketidakakuratan sesekali ini mencegah skor yang lebih tinggi. Fokus pada kolokasi yang lebih tepat akan membantu meningkatkan jangkauan leksikal Anda.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
Anda menggunakan campuran struktur kalimat sederhana dan kompleks. Namun, terdapat beberapa kesalahan tata bahasa di seluruh teks, seperti 'the total number of visitors... were stood at' (kesalahan subject-verb agreement) dan '40 percent of people were felt dissatisfied' (penggunaan passive voice yang salah). Selain itu, terdapat masalah tanda baca dan frasa kecil, seperti 'Although, only 30 percent'. Meskipun kesalahan ini tidak menghambat komunikasi, kesalahan tersebut cukup sering terjadi sehingga mencegah band yang lebih tinggi. Meningkatkan kontrol Anda atas struktur kalimat kompleks akan meningkatkan skor Anda.
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