Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-08-15
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The table illustrates the numerous of visitors during the year before and after refurbishment in the Ashdown Museum.The chart describes the review of how visitors satisfied with their visit during the year.
Overall,The highest number of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year after refurbishment.The visitors to Ashdown Museum had lowest number during the year before refurbishment.
In the first piechart,The increadable number of year before refurbishment had dissatisfied with 40%.5% people recorded with no response.satisfied individuals accounted with 30% which were almost similar to dissatisfied.
very dissatisfied and very satisfied people ranked with 10% and 15% respectively.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, which significantly impacts the score. Because the response is only 98 words, the information is presented in a very fragmented and incomplete manner. You have failed to report on the 'year after' survey data entirely, and the comparison between the two periods is underdeveloped. To improve, you must ensure you cover all parts of the prompt, including a clear overview and detailed comparisons of all data points provided in the charts. The current response is too brief to adequately summarize the main features.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay lacks a logical structure. While there is an attempt at an introduction and a body paragraph, the lack of cohesive devices makes the flow disjointed. Sentences are often short and lack logical connectors, making the progression of ideas difficult to follow. Paragraphing is also insufficient, as the response is essentially a collection of isolated sentences rather than a cohesive report. To improve, use linking words such as 'furthermore', 'in contrast', or 'consequently' to connect your ideas and ensure each paragraph has a clear thematic focus.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is quite limited and contains several errors in word choice and form, such as 'numerous of visitors' instead of 'number of visitors' and 'increadable' (likely a misspelling of 'incredible' or 'increased'). The phrasing 'how visitors satisfied with their visit' is grammatically incorrect and lacks the necessary precision for an academic report. You should focus on using more accurate terminology related to data description, such as 'proportion', 'percentage', and 'fluctuation', and ensure you use the correct word forms to convey your meaning clearly.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text, including issues with subject-verb agreement ('The visitors... had lowest number') and sentence structure. The use of articles is inconsistent, and there are several punctuation errors, such as missing spaces after periods. The range of structures is very limited, consisting mostly of simple sentences. To reach a higher band, you need to demonstrate control over a wider variety of complex sentence structures and improve your accuracy regarding basic grammar rules, such as the correct use of prepositions and articles.
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