Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-08-15
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The table and pi-charts indicates the total number of visitors to Ashdown Museum and their outcome of respondents in terms response before refurbishment and after refurbishment.
Overall, the number of people travel more after refurbishment indicating highest coverage of satisfied while number of individual was less shows more dissatisfied.
The time period of initial refurbishment number of visitor to Ashdown Museum was about 74000. Their responses was unsatisfied remarkably 40% dissatisfied and 10% very satisfied. Likewise, about 30% of people feel satisfied and 15% very satisfied respectively. Moreover, only 5% of visitors has neither satisfied nor dissatisfied.
On Other hand, The people travel after refurbishment coverage more satisfied about 40% satisfied and 35 % satisfied. respectively. In contrast the individual respondent 15 % dissatisfied and 5 % very dissatisfied. However the response seems no response as before. Ashdown Museum is more popular in the recent times and more peoples travel.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response attempts to address the task by summarizing the provided data. However, the information is presented in a confusing and inaccurate manner. For instance, the data interpretation is flawed, such as the claim that 40% and 35% were satisfied after refurbishment, which does not clearly align with the visual data provided. The overview is vague and lacks a clear, accurate summary of the main trends. While the response covers both the table and the charts, the lack of precision in reporting the figures and the failure to make meaningful comparisons between the two periods significantly limit the effectiveness of the report.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is organized into paragraphs, but the logical progression of ideas is weak. The use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or misused, such as the awkward transition 'On Other hand, The people travel after refurbishment coverage more satisfied'. Referencing is frequently unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow the comparison between the two time periods. The sentences are often disjointed, and the overall structure lacks the flow required for a higher band score. Paragraphing is present but does not effectively group related information.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The range of vocabulary is limited and often inaccurate. There are frequent errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'pi-charts indicates', 'outcome of respondents', and 'coverage more satisfied'. The student struggles to use precise terminology to describe statistical data, relying on repetitive and sometimes confusing phrasing. Some terms are used incorrectly, which occasionally impedes the reader's understanding of the data being presented. To improve, the student needs to focus on learning specific vocabulary for describing trends and proportions in data sets.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that affect clarity. There are issues with subject-verb agreement ('The table and pi-charts indicates'), incorrect verb tenses, and awkward sentence structures ('Their responses was unsatisfied remarkably'). The use of complex sentences is attempted but often results in errors that make the meaning unclear. Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with the use of capital letters and commas. While the basic meaning is generally discernible, the high frequency of errors in basic grammar prevents the response from reaching a higher band.
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