Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-08-17
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
This graph give us the information about the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished.
The total numer of visitors to Ashdown Museum During the year before refurbished total visitors is 74,000,and During the year after refurbished total visitors is 92,000.
The number of visitors increase after refurbished.
And people are very satisfy when visiting the Ashdown Museum.And the result of satisfaction after survey.
Before refurbished of Museum the rate of very satisfied person is 15 percent. The rate of satisfied person is 10 percent . The rate of disatisfied person is 40 percent. The rate of very dissatisfied person is 30 percent.And 5 percent of people donot response.
The rate of being like the Museum is decrease because they are not fully refurbished that why most of the people donot like it.
And after refurbished people like a Museum because it is fully refurbished.The rate of very satisfied person is 35 percent. The rate of satisfied person is 40 percent . The rate of disatisfied person is 15 percent. The rate of very dissatisfied person is 5 percent.And 5 percent of people donot response.
According to my opinion the museum after refurbished its value become more increase and the rate of visitors are also increase because they like the Museum.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response covers the main features of the data, including the increase in visitor numbers and the shift in satisfaction levels. However, the analysis is quite superficial. The student lists percentages without effectively synthesising the data or making meaningful comparisons between the two periods. Furthermore, the inclusion of personal opinion ('According to my opinion') is inappropriate for an Academic Task 1 report, which requires an objective summary of the provided data. The explanation for why visitors liked or disliked the museum is speculative and not supported by the charts, which is a significant weakness in task completion.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The response is organised into short, choppy paragraphs, but the flow between sentences is often mechanical and repetitive. The use of cohesive devices is limited, relying heavily on simple conjunctions like 'And' to start sentences. There is a lack of logical progression; the transition between the visitor numbers and the satisfaction survey results is abrupt. While the reader can follow the general structure, the lack of sophisticated linking words or varied sentence structures makes the text feel disjointed and simplistic.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is basic and repetitive. Phrases such as 'the rate of' are used repeatedly to describe percentages, and there are several errors in word choice and form, such as 'disatisfied' (spelling), 'donot response' (incorrect verb/noun usage), and 'after refurbished' (should be 'after the refurbishment'). The range of vocabulary is insufficient to demonstrate precision; for instance, using 'like' or 'donot like' to describe satisfaction levels is too informal and lacks the nuance required for a formal report.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. There are consistent issues with article usage ('the Museum'), verb tense consistency ('This graph give us'), and sentence structure (e.g., 'The rate of being like the Museum is decrease'). The student relies almost exclusively on simple sentence structures. Attempts at more complex sentences are often faulty, such as 'that why most of the people donot like it.' Punctuation is also inconsistent, with missing spaces after periods and unnecessary capitalisation.
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