Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-08-17

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The given table demonstrates the total numbers of visitors before and after the refurbishment of Ashdown Museum, while the chart gives information about the result of surveys on their satisfaction and dissatisfaction during the same two periods.

Overall, It is clear that, the numbers of visitors increased significantly after the refurbishment for about 18000. Along with that, the largest proportion jumped to very satisfied from dissatisfied.

During the year before refurbishment, the largest proportion accounted for dissatisfaction of the visitors for about 40%, while satisfied and very satisfied was a figure of 30% and 15%, respectively.

However, after the refurbishment, satisfied visitors holded the largest amount for about 40%. Besides that, the visitors with very satisfaction rose significantly to 35%. Consequently, the proportion for dissatisfaction declined dramatically to 1

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, which significantly impacts the ability to fully develop the response. While you have identified the main trends—the increase in visitor numbers and the shift in satisfaction levels—the analysis is incomplete. The final sentence is cut off abruptly ('declined dramatically to 1'), leaving the data reporting unfinished. To improve, ensure you provide a comprehensive overview of all data points and complete your sentences. The lack of sufficient length prevents a full comparison of the data, resulting in an under-developed response.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The essay is organized into logical paragraphs, and there is a clear attempt to use cohesive devices such as 'Overall', 'Along with that', and 'However'. However, the flow is interrupted by the incomplete final sentence. The progression of ideas is generally logical, moving from the visitor numbers to the satisfaction survey results. To achieve a higher band, ensure that your paragraphs are balanced and that your concluding thoughts are fully articulated rather than ending mid-sentence, which disrupts the overall coherence of the piece.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

You have used some appropriate vocabulary for describing trends, such as 'increased significantly', 'proportion', and 'declined dramatically'. However, there are errors in word choice and form, such as 'very satisfaction' (should be 'very satisfied') and 'holded' (incorrect past tense of 'hold'). These errors are noticeable but do not completely impede communication. To improve, focus on using accurate word forms and expanding your range of reporting verbs and nouns to avoid repetition.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors. Examples include 'the numbers of visitors increased... for about 18000' (preposition error), 'satisfied visitors holded' (verb form error), and 'the visitors with very satisfaction' (noun/adjective confusion). Punctuation is also inconsistent, with unnecessary commas used in several places, such as 'It is clear that, the numbers'. While the meaning is generally clear, these persistent errors limit the score.

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