Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-08-17

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The table and pie chart present data regarding visitor numbers and satisfaction and Ashdown Museum before and after refurnished. Overall, it is clear that both the total number of visitors and overall customer satisfaction increases significantly after the museum was renovated. According to the table, the total number of visitors rose from 74,000 in the year before refurbishment to 92,000 in the year following the change. The year before 30% visitors very dissatisfied and after they rose at 40 %. In addition 40% visitors are dissatisfied and the percentage declined and raate at 15%. The very dissatisfied and no response visitors are approximately same therefore, in before 10% are very dissatisfied and 5 % are non reponse

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.5

The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, which significantly impacts the score. While you have identified the main features—the increase in visitor numbers and the shift in satisfaction levels—the analysis is incomplete. You have not fully reported on all categories in the pie charts, and the data provided for the 'very dissatisfied' and 'dissatisfied' categories is confusing and contains factual errors based on the provided image. To improve, ensure you cover all data points provided in the prompt and provide a more comprehensive overview of the trends rather than just listing isolated figures.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay lacks a clear structure. While there is an attempt at an introduction and an overview, the body paragraphs are poorly developed and lack logical progression. The use of cohesive devices is very limited, making the text feel like a list of disjointed sentences rather than a cohesive report. To improve, use linking words such as 'furthermore', 'in contrast', or 'consequently' to connect your ideas and ensure each paragraph has a clear focus, such as one for visitor numbers and one for satisfaction levels.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is quite basic and repetitive. There are several errors in word choice and form, such as 'refurnished' instead of 'refurbished' and 'raate' instead of 'rate'. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to describe trends accurately; for example, you rely on simple verbs like 'rose' and 'declined' without using more precise academic language to describe the scale of change. To reach a higher band, focus on using a wider range of synonyms and collocations appropriate for describing data, such as 'experienced a surge' or 'remained relatively stable'.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The response contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. There are issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., '30% visitors very dissatisfied'), incorrect preposition usage ('rose at 40%'), and missing articles. The sentence structures are mostly simple, with very few attempts at complex sentences. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, ensuring correct verb tenses when describing past data, and proofreading for common errors like missing 'the' or 'of'. Increasing the variety of sentence structures will also help improve your score.

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