Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-08-17
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
the given table shows the information about the numbers of visitors to ashdown museum from the year before and the after refurbishment and a chart illustrates the data of surveys asked by vsitors how satisfied they were before and after the refurbuishment of the museum.
overview,overall before refurbuishment dissatisfied visitiors are increased where as, after the refurbuishment dissatisfied visitors were decreased.
to begin with,before refurbishment of the museum the visitors who were not satisfied are increasingly 40% , 30 % were satiesfied while, very satiesfied are 15% very disatiesfied are 10% and the visitors who gave no reponse are about 5%.
however,after the refurbishment of the museum 35% of very satiesfied visitors has incresed where no response of visitors remains the same and a 5% decrese in very dissatiesfied while satiesfied visitors has increased as compare to that of before refurbishment satiesfied visitors and disatiesfied visitors are reported to be 15% only.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response addresses the task by summarizing the main features of the visitor numbers and satisfaction surveys. However, the report is incomplete. You failed to include the actual visitor numbers provided in the table (74,000 and 92,000), which is a key part of the data. Furthermore, the overview is somewhat confusing and lacks clarity regarding the trends. While you identified the shift in satisfaction, the description of the data is fragmented. To improve, ensure you explicitly state the total visitor numbers and provide a more structured comparison between the two periods, rather than just listing percentages.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is organized into paragraphs, but the logical flow is weak. The transition between the introduction, overview, and body paragraphs is abrupt. The use of cohesive devices is limited and sometimes misused, such as the awkward phrasing 'overview,overall'. The referencing is occasionally unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow the comparison between the 'before' and 'after' periods. To improve, use clearer signposting language (e.g., 'In contrast,' 'Regarding the satisfaction levels,') and ensure each paragraph has a clear focus that links back to the main prompt.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is repetitive and lacks the precision required for an Academic Task 1 report. There are several spelling errors, such as 'refurbuishment', 'vsitors', 'satiesfied', and 'disatiesfied'. The range of vocabulary is limited, relying heavily on basic descriptors. You should aim to use more varied terminology to describe trends, such as 'experienced a significant rise' or 'remained stable'. The misuse of words like 'increasingly' to describe a static percentage (40%) further impacts the clarity of your report. Focus on learning specific collocations for describing data trends.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede communication. There are issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'dissatisfied visitors are increased'), incorrect tense usage, and awkward sentence structures. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with missing spaces after commas and periods. The range of sentence structures is limited to simple or poorly constructed complex sentences. To improve, focus on basic sentence construction and proofreading for common errors like pluralization and verb tense consistency. Practicing the use of complex sentences with correct subordinating conjunctions will also help raise your score.
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