Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-08-18
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
This chart how the comparison of visitors of mueseum before renovation and after. The given information show the percentage of very satisfird visitors, satisdied, dissatisfied and the vistors with no response.
The information also provide exact figure of vistors before refurbished and after. About 74 thousand people vist to the museum before and after upgrade the number change to 92 thousand around the year. audeince need basic upgrade to enhance their experience.
However,according to our data the number of people who is super satisfied before refurbishment is abount 15 percent, Whos are just satisfied is around 30 percent, the percentage of vistors which are dissatisfied is 40 percent and those who are very dissatisfied is about 0 percent. We also have 5 percent of people with no response.
Moreover, after refurbishment the data is changed. The vistors who is ver satisfied is 35 percent a huge change, and the numbers of satisfied vistors is 40 percent, we also have dissatisfied vistors this year around 15 percent, almost 5 percent of the who have ver bad experience and very dissatisfied. We also have 5 percent of people with no response
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers the main features of the data, including the increase in visitor numbers and the shift in satisfaction levels. However, the analysis is somewhat superficial. For example, the statement 'audeince need basic upgrade to enhance their experience' is an unnecessary subjective comment that does not report on the provided data. While the key figures are mentioned, the comparison between the two periods could be more analytical. The response identifies the main trends but lacks a clear overview or summary paragraph that synthesizes the information effectively, which is a requirement for a higher band score in Task 1.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organized into paragraphs, but the logical flow is hindered by repetitive sentence structures and a lack of sophisticated cohesive devices. While some linking words like 'However' and 'Moreover' are used, they are often placed at the start of sentences in a mechanical way. The referencing is sometimes unclear, such as in the phrase 'the data is changed', which does not specify what data is being referred to. The progression of ideas is generally understandable, but the lack of varied transitions makes the writing feel somewhat disjointed.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is limited and contains several spelling errors, such as 'mueseum', 'satisfird', 'satisdied', and 'vistors'. The range of vocabulary is basic and repetitive, relying heavily on simple descriptors. There is little attempt to use less common lexical items or precise terminology related to data reporting. Phrases like 'a huge change' are informal and lack the precision expected in an academic report. To improve, you should focus on using more varied synonyms for 'increase', 'decrease', and 'percentage' to avoid repetition and demonstrate a wider range of language.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. There are issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'the number of people who is super satisfied'), incorrect verb forms ('before refurbished'), and missing articles. The sentence structures are predominantly simple, with limited attempts at complex sentences. When complex structures are attempted, they often contain errors, such as 'the vistors who is ver satisfied is 35 percent'. Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly regarding spacing after commas and periods. A greater focus on basic sentence construction and proofreading is necessary.
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