Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-08-18
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 6.0)
The given tables and bar charts compares the data in Ashdown museum regarding the number of visitors and the outcome of surveys of visitor satisfaction respectively before or after it was restored.
Overall, the number of visitors significantly increased after it was refurbished while the dissatisfied visitors decreased sharply and very satisfied had a rapid increase.
Looking at the details, it is evident that the number of visitors in museum skyrocketed from 74 thousand to 92 thousand after the renovation.
On the other hand, before restoration 40% of visitors were dissatisfied compared to very dissatisfied who accounted just one-tenth. The proportion for satisfied and very satisfied were 30% and 15% respectively. No response was remained minimum 5% in both periods.
The proportion for very satisfied shoot up to 35% after restoration and the same upward trend shown for satisfied accounted to 40%. The dissatisfied plummeted to just 15% and very dissatisfied witnessed a downward trend at 55.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 6.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 6.0 |
| Overall | 6.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0
The response covers all parts of the task, providing a clear overview and highlighting key trends in both visitor numbers and satisfaction levels. The main features are identified, such as the increase in visitor numbers and the shift from dissatisfaction to satisfaction. However, the data reporting contains inaccuracies; for instance, you state 'very dissatisfied witnessed a downward trend at 55', which is confusing and likely a typo, as the data shows a decrease to 5%. Additionally, the comparison between the two periods could be more precise by consistently using the provided figures to support your claims.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The essay is logically organized into paragraphs, with a clear introduction, overview, and body paragraphs focusing on different aspects of the data. Cohesive devices such as 'On the other hand' and 'Looking at the details' are used to guide the reader. However, the flow is occasionally hindered by awkward phrasing, such as 'No response was remained minimum 5%'. While the paragraphing is appropriate, the internal cohesion within the final paragraph is slightly weakened by the confusing statement regarding the 'very dissatisfied' category, which disrupts the logical progression of the data analysis.
Lexical Resource — Band 6.0
You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using words like 'skyrocketed', 'plummeted', and 'refurbished' to describe trends effectively. There are some inaccuracies in word choice and collocation, such as 'No response was remained' and 'the same upward trend shown for satisfied accounted to 40%'. These errors do not impede communication, but they do limit the precision of your report. To reach a higher band, focus on using more accurate collocations when describing statistical changes and ensure that your terminology for data categories is precise.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0
The response uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While many sentences are clear, there are several grammatical errors, such as 'The given tables and bar charts compares' (subject-verb agreement) and 'before or after it was restored' (incorrect preposition/conjunction usage). Additionally, the sentence 'very dissatisfied witnessed a downward trend at 55' contains a significant error that obscures the intended meaning. While these errors do not prevent the reader from understanding the general point, they occur frequently enough to impact the overall accuracy of the writing.
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