Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-08-18

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The tabular data compares the total number of visitor to Ashdown museum before and after renovation during the year. While, pie charts depict the proportion of visitor satisfaction by survey before and after refurbishment of museum.

Focusing on table, only 74,000 tourist visited during the year. Whereas, after renovation 92,000 visitors preferred to explore museum.

Examining graphs, less than half people felt dissatisfied when they were visiting before refurbishment. 30% visitors satisfied with their visit at museum. In contrast, half of the people of 30% felt very satisfied. Rest of the two category showed 10% very dissatisfied and no response was by 5% tourist.

After renovation, 40% accounting satisfaction through exploration of museum. The second highest was the very satisfied category. 15% was made up by those people who were dissatisfied. Very satisfied and no response categorise people represented merely 5% during the year.

Overall, high number of people visited the museum after refurbishment and same percentage of people who responded no response showed throughout the year after and before renovation.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

You have successfully identified the main features of both the table and the pie charts, providing a clear comparison between the two periods. You correctly highlighted the increase in visitor numbers and the shift in satisfaction levels. However, the response lacks precision in reporting the data. For instance, you mention 'half of the people of 30% felt very satisfied,' which is mathematically confusing and does not accurately reflect the chart data. Additionally, some figures are slightly misstated or lack clarity. To improve, ensure that you accurately transcribe the percentages and numbers from the visuals and avoid ambiguous phrasing when describing proportions.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is organised into logical paragraphs, with an introduction, body paragraphs for the table and charts, and a brief summary. However, the use of cohesive devices is somewhat mechanical and occasionally awkward, such as 'Focusing on table' and 'Examining graphs,' which lack appropriate articles. The transition between sentences is sometimes abrupt, making the flow feel disjointed. To reach a higher band, focus on using a wider variety of linking words and phrases to connect your ideas more fluidly, and ensure that your referencing (e.g., 'the museum') is consistent throughout the text.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

Your vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, allowing you to convey the main points. You use some relevant terms like 'refurbishment,' 'proportion,' and 'satisfaction.' However, there are instances of imprecise word choice and awkward phrasing, such as 'no response was by 5% tourist' and 'categorise people represented.' There are also minor errors in word formation, such as 'tourist' instead of 'tourists.' To improve, work on using more precise collocations and ensure that your nouns and verbs agree in number. Expanding your range of descriptive adjectives and adverbs would also help to add nuance to your report.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

You demonstrate a mix of simple and some complex sentence structures. However, there are frequent grammatical errors, particularly regarding articles (e.g., 'before and after renovation during the year' should be 'the year'), pluralisation (e.g., '74,000 tourist'), and preposition usage. Some sentences are grammatically incomplete or awkward, such as 'The second highest was the very satisfied category.' While these errors do not completely impede communication, they are frequent enough to prevent a higher score. Focusing on basic sentence construction and proofreading for article usage and subject-verb agreement will significantly improve your accuracy.

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