Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-08-18

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The diagram illustrates the total number of visitors in Ashdown Museum and the results of the tourists survey satisfaction before and after the repair.

Overall, The total number of the tourists who visit the Ashdown Museum in a year before the repair is 74,000 then when it was repaired it became 92,000. while the results of the satisfaction rate of the visitors before the repair the highest rate which is 40% came with the people who are dissatisfied with almost nearly satisfied people which is 30%, after the refurbishment it change the satisfied people has the highest rating now which is 40% while the very satisfied people is 35%.

In detail, The surveys of the satisfaction rates before the refurbishment the highest was 40% dissatisfied, followed by nearly the same rate of satisfied 30%, then the 10-15% which came to very satisfied and very dissatisfied, then 5% which people has no response.

Whereas, after the repair there is a big change to the rate of the satisfied and the very satisfied which has nearly the same with a highest rate of 40-35%, then the dissatisfaction rate went down to 15%. then the last rate which has 5% came to the dissatisfied tied up with no response.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response covers all parts of the task, including the visitor numbers and the satisfaction survey data. You successfully identified the main trends, such as the increase in visitor numbers and the shift in satisfaction levels post-refurbishment. However, the reporting of data is sometimes imprecise. For instance, stating '40-35%' is vague, and the description of the 'before' survey data is slightly confusing due to the phrasing 'almost nearly satisfied'. To reach a higher band, ensure that data points are cited clearly and accurately without using repetitive or imprecise language. The overview is present but could be more clearly separated from the detailed body paragraphs.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is organized into an introduction, an overview, and two body paragraphs, which provides a logical structure. You use some cohesive devices like 'Overall', 'In detail', and 'Whereas' to signal transitions. However, the flow within paragraphs is occasionally hindered by awkward sentence structures and repetitive phrasing. For example, the transition between the visitor numbers and the survey data in the second paragraph is abrupt. Additionally, some referencing is unclear, such as 'the last rate which has 5% came to the dissatisfied tied up with no response', which makes the relationship between the data points difficult to follow.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The vocabulary is adequate for the task but lacks the precision and variety required for a higher band. You rely on basic terms like 'big change', 'highest rate', and 'people'. There are also some awkward collocations, such as 'tourists survey satisfaction' instead of 'visitor satisfaction survey' and 'repair' instead of 'refurbishment' or 'renovation'. While the meaning is generally clear, the range of vocabulary is limited, and there is a tendency to repeat the same descriptors throughout the text. Expanding your range of synonyms for 'increase', 'decrease', and 'satisfaction' would significantly improve your score.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede readability. Issues include subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'the satisfied people has the highest rating'), incorrect tense usage (e.g., 'it change' instead of 'it changed'), and awkward punctuation. Many sentences are run-on or lack necessary articles, such as 'in a year before the repair'. While the meaning is generally understandable, the frequency of these errors prevents the writing from reaching a higher band. Focusing on basic sentence construction and proofreading for subject-verb agreement would be beneficial.

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