Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-08-19
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
the table gives the information regarding mass of visitors to ashdown Museum before and after the year of refurbishment below this the two pie charts illustrates the information about the results of visitor satisfaction.
The most of the visitors had been visited after the refurbishment of Ashdown Museum and before the refurbishment high numbers of visitors were seen as a dissatisfied but on the other side after the refurbishment most of visitors were satisfied.
It is clearly seen that during the year before refurbishment the population of 74000 people were visited the museum unfortunately in the year of after refurbishment high numbers of visitors was seen in museum of 92000.
In the results of peoples satisfaction survey high percentage of dissatisfaction was seen which is 40. Followed by satisfied people whos survey was about in 30 proportion. on the other side in the year of after refurbishment satisfied people take place the proportion the dissatisfied. moreover 35 percent of mass were very satisfied after the refurbishment of Ashdown museum.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response addresses the task by summarizing the main features of the table and pie charts. However, the analysis is somewhat superficial. While you correctly identify the increase in visitor numbers (74,000 to 92,000), the description of the satisfaction data is confusing. For instance, stating '40' without specifying units or clearly contrasting the 'before' and 'after' survey results makes the information difficult to follow. To reach a higher band, ensure that all data points are clearly linked to the specific time periods and that comparisons are more precise, rather than relying on vague descriptions like 'high numbers'.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organized into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the flow between ideas is often mechanical or disjointed. Phrases like 'on the other side' are used repeatedly and sometimes inappropriately. The transition between the table data and the pie chart data is abrupt. To improve, use a wider variety of cohesive devices (e.g., 'consequently', 'in contrast', 'furthermore') and ensure that each paragraph has a clear topic sentence that guides the reader through the information logically.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task but lacks precision and variety. You rely on repetitive phrasing such as 'mass of visitors' and 'high numbers of visitors'. There are also issues with word choice, such as 'population of 74000 people were visited' (incorrect passive voice) and 'satisfied people take place the proportion'. To improve, focus on using more academic collocations and precise terminology related to data reporting, such as 'a significant rise', 'the majority of respondents', or 'a marked shift in opinion'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text that occasionally impede clarity. Examples include subject-verb agreement issues ('two pie charts illustrates'), incorrect verb forms ('had been visited'), and awkward sentence structures ('whos survey was about in 30 proportion'). The range of sentence structures is limited, and the punctuation is inconsistent. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, specifically the use of passive voice for describing data and ensuring subject-verb agreement. Proofreading for these common errors will significantly improve the readability of your work.
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