Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-08-19

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The given table illustrate the numbers of tourists to Ashdown Museum during the year before and after it's renovation. The charts give the outcome of surveys asking to visitors to what extent they were satisfied during the same two periods.

We can see increase in number of visitors after restoration of the museum. The results of surveys show that the strength of people who are very satisfied raised to almost double while we can see a change of increase in satisfied section but dissatisfied and very dissatisfied remains less than a half and no response remains same.

During the year before renovation the numbers of visitors is 74000 but after it rise to 92000. But when we survive about museum the people who are very satisfied is 15 percent but after it increases to 35 and numbers of satisfied raised to 40 from 30 while the numbers of dissatisfied visitors decreases from 40 to 30 similarly who are very dissatisfied become 5 from 10 but the visitors who no response remains same to 5 percent.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

You have successfully identified the main trends, such as the increase in visitor numbers and the shift in satisfaction levels. However, the response lacks a clear overview or summary of the most significant trends, which is essential for a high band score. While you included specific data points, the analysis is somewhat mechanical. For instance, you list figures without fully synthesizing the comparison between the two periods. To improve, ensure you group the data logically and provide a clear 'overview' paragraph that highlights the most striking changes, such as the significant rise in 'very satisfied' visitors alongside the overall increase in attendance.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The essay is organized into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is somewhat limited and occasionally repetitive. Phrases like 'we can see' are used frequently, which makes the flow feel a bit mechanical. Transitions between sentences could be smoother; for example, the jump between discussing visitor numbers and survey results in the second paragraph is abrupt. To improve, try using a wider variety of linking words and phrases (e.g., 'consequently,' 'in contrast,' 'furthermore') to connect your ideas more naturally and improve the overall logical progression of the report.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

You have a sufficient range of vocabulary to convey the main points, such as 'renovation,' 'satisfied,' and 'dissatisfied.' However, there are some inaccuracies in word choice and collocation. For example, 'strength of people' is not the correct term; 'proportion' or 'percentage' would be more appropriate. Additionally, 'survive' is used incorrectly in the context of a survey. To reach a higher band, focus on using more precise academic vocabulary and ensuring that words are used in their correct context. Expanding your range of synonyms for 'increase' and 'decrease' would also be beneficial.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

There are several grammatical errors throughout the text that occasionally hinder clarity. Subject-verb agreement is a recurring issue, such as 'table illustrate' (should be 'illustrates') and 'numbers of visitors is' (should be 'are'). There are also errors with articles and prepositions, such as 'asking to visitors' and 'no response remains same.' While you attempt some complex sentence structures, they are often marred by these slips. To improve, focus on proofreading for basic agreement errors and ensure that your verb tenses are consistent when describing past data.

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