Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-08-19
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 6.5)
The given pie chart along with a table illustrate difference in the number of people visiting Ashdown Museum before and after renovation. Additionally, pie charts represent the satisfaction rate of visitors according to the result of several surveys.
Total number of visitors were drastically increased from 74,000 to 92,000 during the year after refurbishment. There were 18,000 more visitors after renovation of Ashdown Museum. Additionally, there were only 15% visitors who were very satisfied before whereas satisfaction escalated to 35% after renovation of the building. Moreover, rate of dissatisfaction was quite high before refurbishment about 40% which was improved to overall 15% after remodelling. Nevertheless, moderately satisfied group showed negligible change after renovation of Ashdown Museum according to survey reports. Furthermore, only 5% of visitors did not respond to the survey which remained same before and after remodelling of the museum.
In conclusion, overall inflow of visitors and positive response in survey reports were observed after refurbishment of Ashdown Museum.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 6.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 6.0 |
| Overall | 6.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5
The response covers all parts of the task, including the table and the pie charts. You have successfully identified the main trends, such as the increase in visitor numbers and the shift in satisfaction levels. However, the report is somewhat brief. To reach a higher band, you should provide a more detailed analysis of the data. For instance, while you mentioned the increase in 'very satisfied' visitors, you could have contrasted this more explicitly with the 'dissatisfied' category to highlight the overall improvement in visitor experience. The summary is accurate, but more depth in comparing the two periods would strengthen the response.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5
The response is logically organized with a clear introduction, body paragraph, and conclusion. You use some cohesive devices like 'Additionally', 'Moreover', and 'Nevertheless' to link ideas. However, the flow is occasionally mechanical. For example, the transition between the visitor numbers and the satisfaction survey results could be smoother. Paragraphing is used, but the body paragraph is quite dense; splitting it into two—one for visitor numbers and one for survey results—would improve the overall structure and readability of the report.
Lexical Resource — Band 6.0
You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'refurbishment', 'escalated', and 'negligible'. However, there are some minor inaccuracies in word choice and collocation. For example, 'Total number of visitors were drastically increased' is grammatically awkward; 'The total number of visitors increased significantly' would be more natural. Additionally, the phrase 'overall inflow of visitors' is a bit repetitive. To improve, try to vary your vocabulary further and ensure that your word choices are precise and contextually appropriate.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0
The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. There are several grammatical errors, such as subject-verb agreement issues ('Total number of visitors were') and missing articles ('rate of dissatisfaction was quite high... about 40%'). While these errors do not impede communication, they are frequent enough to prevent a higher score. You should focus on proofreading for basic errors like article usage and verb agreement. Incorporating a wider variety of complex sentence structures, such as using relative clauses or passive voice more effectively, would also help improve your score.
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