Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-08-20

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The given lable diagram illustrate that the number of tourists of Ashdown Museum in the previous and subsequent year it was refurbished and results of surveys that visitors are agree with their visit or not.

Overall, both visitor numbers and overall satisfaction increased significantly after the museum was refurbished. Most visitors expressed dissatisfaction before the renovation, whereas the majority reported being satisfied or very satisfied afterward.

The number of tourists of Museum id 74,000 during the year before refurbishment and 92,000 in following year.In terms of satisfaction,dissatisfied made up largest rating at 40% and after year it turns into 15%, very satisfied number increased from 15% to 35% but no response remain the same in both years.Consistantly te number of dissatisfied dropped to 15% while very dissatisfied decreased at 5%.Year before refurbishment,the quantity of satisfied were 30% and following year visitors become the largest part at 40% however,very dissatisfied has a massive drooped.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response covers all parts of the task by reporting the visitor numbers and the survey results for both periods. The main features are identified, such as the increase in visitor numbers and the shift in satisfaction levels. However, the analysis is somewhat mechanical and lacks a more sophisticated synthesis of the data. For instance, while you mention the increase in 'very satisfied' visitors, the comparison between the two years could be more fluid. The overview is clear, but the supporting details in the final paragraph are slightly cluttered, which hinders the clarity of the comparison.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is organised into logical paragraphs, with an introduction, an overview, and a body paragraph. However, the progression of ideas within the final paragraph is somewhat disjointed. The use of cohesive devices is present but occasionally mechanical or misused, such as 'Consistantly te number' and 'after year it turns into'. Referencing is sometimes unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow the specific trends being described. Improved use of linking words and better sentence-to-sentence flow would enhance the coherence of the response.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The range of vocabulary is adequate for the task but lacks precision and variety. There are several spelling errors, such as 'lable' instead of 'table', 'Consistantly' instead of 'Consistently', and 'drooped' instead of 'dropped'. Additionally, word choice is occasionally awkward, such as 'visitors are agree' instead of 'visitors' satisfaction levels' or 'visitors' opinions'. While the vocabulary is sufficient to convey the main points, the frequent errors and limited range of academic collocations prevent a higher score.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The response uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede readability. Examples include 'The given lable diagram illustrate' (subject-verb agreement), 'dissatisfied made up largest rating' (missing articles), and 'following year visitors become the largest part' (tense inconsistency). Punctuation is also inconsistent, with missing spaces after periods. While the meaning is generally clear, the high frequency of basic grammatical errors limits the score in this criterion.

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