Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-08-20
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
The table below illustrates the visitors numbers to asdown museum during the year before and after it was refurbished. The chart show the result of survey asking visitor how visitors satisfied when they visit during the same two periods.
Overall the table showing the visitors numbers to asdown where the chart illustrates the results of serveys of visitors satisfaction the chart consists of two main squares where showing year before refurbishment another one is year after refurbishment.
At the first , during the year before refurbishment visitors are only 74000 where during the year after refurbishment visitors are 9200p
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.5 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, reaching only 99 words. Consequently, the task is only partially addressed. While the introduction attempts to paraphrase the prompt, the body paragraph is extremely underdeveloped. It mentions the visitor numbers but fails to report on the satisfaction survey data entirely, which is a key component of the task. The lack of a clear overview and the failure to cover all parts of the prompt significantly limit the score.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.5
The response lacks logical progression. The paragraphing is ineffective, and the transition between the introduction and the body is abrupt. There is a lack of cohesive devices to link ideas, and the repetition of phrases like 'during the year before refurbishment' makes the writing feel mechanical and disjointed. The overall structure is underdeveloped, making it difficult for the reader to follow the intended comparison between the two periods.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.5
The vocabulary is very limited and repetitive. Words such as 'visitors', 'numbers', and 'refurbishment' are used repeatedly without variation. There are also errors in word choice and spelling, such as 'serveys' instead of 'surveys' and 'asdown' instead of 'Ashdown'. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to convey the information with any degree of precision or academic tone.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.5
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that impede clarity. Examples include 'The chart show' (subject-verb agreement), 'visitors numbers' (incorrect noun phrase), and 'visitors are only 74000 where during' (incorrect use of 'where' as a conjunction). Sentence structures are basic and often faulty. There is little evidence of complex sentence structures, and the punctuation is inconsistent, which further detracts from the overall quality of the writing.
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