Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-08-20
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
the given pie chart illustrate the number of visitors of Ashdown satisfied with their visit before and after refurbishment.the given pie chart depict the number of visitors during the year before Refurbishment was 74000 and after Refurbishment was 92000.in the chart the number of satisfied visitors to Ashdown down museum was 30 percent before Refurbishment whereas after Refurbishment the number visitors satisfied with the museum was35 percent . the number of visitors who very much satisfied with their visits to Ashdown museum was 15 before Refurbishment when compared to after refurbishment it was 35 peercent which was huge satisfied as we move forwad to the number of visitors dissatisfiedwith their visit was 30 percent before refurbishment whereas less number of visitors dissatisfied was only 15 percent . the num ber of visitors who were extremely dissatisfied before refurbishment was 10 percent
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, which negatively impacts the score. While you have identified the main features—the increase in total visitor numbers and the shifts in satisfaction levels—the analysis is somewhat mechanical and lacks a clear overview or synthesis of the data. You have included specific figures, but the presentation is fragmented. To improve, ensure you provide a clear introductory summary and group the data logically rather than listing statistics in isolation. The failure to reach the word count, combined with the lack of a cohesive summary, limits the development of the response.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The text lacks paragraphing, which makes it difficult to follow the progression of ideas. There is a lack of cohesive devices to link sentences; the writing relies on simple, repetitive structures like 'before refurbishment' and 'after refurbishment' without using transition words or phrases to guide the reader. The referencing is sometimes unclear, and the overall arrangement feels like a list of data points rather than a structured report. To improve, use paragraphs to separate the introduction, the main features, and the comparison, and incorporate linking words such as 'furthermore', 'in contrast', or 'consequently'.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is quite limited and repetitive, relying heavily on the words provided in the prompt. There are several spelling errors, such as 'peercent', 'forwad', and 'dissatisfiedwith', as well as grammatical errors in word choice, such as 'huge satisfied'. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to demonstrate the flexibility required for higher bands. To improve, try to use synonyms for 'visitors' (e.g., 'attendees', 'patrons') and vary your descriptive language for the data (e.g., 'a significant rise', 'a notable decline', 'remained stable').
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors, including missing articles ('the given pie chart'), incorrect verb forms ('illustrate' instead of 'illustrates'), and punctuation issues. Sentence structures are basic and often run-on, lacking the variety of complex structures expected at higher levels. For example, 'the number of visitors who very much satisfied' is grammatically incorrect. To improve, focus on basic sentence construction, ensuring subject-verb agreement and correct article usage. Practice combining simple sentences into complex ones using relative clauses or subordinating conjunctions to improve your range.
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