Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-08-20
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The table and pie chart illustrates the total number of visitors to Ashdown Museum in during the year before and after refurbishment and results of surveys of visitors satisfaction in six different categories.
Overall the during the year after refurbishment as High compare to before before refurbishment in visitors are visiting,moreover year before refurbishment as most of people are dissatisfied and after refurbishment most of people are satisfied to visiting museum.
Ashdown Museum individuals are visiting in during the year before refurbishment as 74,000 . during the year after refurbishment as rose 92,000.
In result of surveys of visitors satisfaction visiting museum as year before refurbishment as highest individuals are dissatisfied in 40% and 30% of satisfied Moreover very satisfied in 15% and less people vote in 10% in very satisfied and less at 5% inNo responses. And year after refurbishment as Highest 40% people are vote and 35% in very satisfied and 15% in dissatisfied and less in 5% of very satisfied,5% no responses.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers the main features of the data, such as the increase in visitor numbers and the shift in satisfaction levels. However, the reporting is somewhat mechanical and lacks a clear, analytical overview. The data is presented in a fragmented way, and some figures are difficult to interpret due to awkward phrasing (e.g., 'less people vote in 10%'). While the main trends are identified, the comparison between the two periods could be more effectively integrated rather than listing statistics in isolation. The response would benefit from a more cohesive summary of the key changes rather than just listing the percentages for each category.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is divided into paragraphs, but the internal structure is weak. The use of cohesive devices is limited and often inaccurate, such as the repetitive use of 'as' and 'in' to connect ideas. The progression of information is disjointed, particularly in the second paragraph where the sentences are poorly linked. The referencing is sometimes unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow the comparison between the 'before' and 'after' periods. Improved use of linking words like 'consequently', 'in contrast', or 'whereas' would significantly enhance the flow of the response.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is quite limited and repetitive. Phrases like 'people are vote' and 'individuals are visiting' are grammatically incorrect and unnatural. There is little attempt to use a range of vocabulary to describe trends or data points (e.g., using 'rose' is good, but it is not supported by other descriptive verbs). The student relies heavily on basic terminology, and the misuse of words like 'vote' instead of 'respond' or 'rate' hinders the precision of the report. Expanding the range of reporting verbs and adjectives would help convey the information more professionally.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text, including issues with subject-verb agreement, article usage, and sentence structure. For example, 'The table and pie chart illustrates' should be 'illustrate', and 'moreover year before refurbishment as most of people' is syntactically broken. The response relies mostly on simple sentence structures, and attempts at more complex sentences often result in errors that impede clarity. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with missing spaces after commas and periods. Greater attention to basic sentence construction and proofreading for subject-verb agreement is necessary.
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