Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-08-20
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
The pie chart represents the numbers of crowd how happy they were with there tour .
The data has been given in numbers
To commets with fitst one, year befor refurbishment in this graph there are only five person in both table they won't response .Although, the number of very satisfied person is fifteen only or foury people's are dissatisatisfied. While, thirty people's are satisfied. In this the numbers of visitors is seventy four thousand.
Probing further, in the second one the number of very satisfied persone is increased by double 35. On the other hand fifteen humans are dissatisfied. Secondary foury people's are satisfied after refurbisment. In the end remaining 10 persons are no response and very dissatisfied. In this the visitors
Overall, it can be seen that five percent people's are no response in any condition. But after renovation the ratio of very satisfied people's is increased by double.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response attempts to address the task by describing the data, but it fails to provide a clear or accurate summary. The interpretation of the figures is inconsistent and confusing, particularly when referencing the survey percentages versus the total visitor numbers. For example, the mention of 'five person' or 'fifteen humans' lacks clarity and does not accurately reflect the data provided in the charts. The overview is very brief and fails to highlight the main trends effectively. To improve, you must focus on accurately reporting the data points and identifying the most significant changes between the two periods, rather than listing numbers in a disjointed manner.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The essay lacks a logical flow. While there are paragraph breaks, the progression of ideas is disjointed and difficult to follow. The use of cohesive devices is often inappropriate or mechanical, such as 'To commets with fitst one' and 'Probing further', which do not fit the academic style required for a report. Referencing is frequently unclear, making it difficult for the reader to understand which data point is being discussed. To improve, focus on using standard linking phrases and ensuring that each paragraph has a clear, singular focus that connects logically to the next.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
The vocabulary is very limited and often inappropriate for an academic report. There are frequent errors in word choice, such as using 'humans' instead of 'visitors' or 'respondents', and 'crowd' instead of 'number of visitors'. Spelling errors are also prevalent, such as 'dissatisatisfied' and 'befor'. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to convey the information with precision. To improve, you should learn and use specific terminology related to data description, such as 'proportion', 'percentage', 'fluctuated', and 'remained stable', and focus on accurate spelling.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that often impede communication. There are significant issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'the number of very satisfied persone is increased'), pluralization (e.g., 'thirty people's'), and sentence structure. The attempt at complex sentences is largely unsuccessful due to these persistent errors. Punctuation is also inconsistent throughout the text. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence structures, ensuring correct subject-verb agreement, and proofreading for common errors like incorrect plural forms and missing articles.
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