Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-08-21
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The table shows the number of people visits Ashdown Museum before and after refurbishment. and the chart shows the level of satisfaction of visitors before and after furnishing.
The table shows a massive increase of visitors during the year after refurbishment from 74,000 to 92,000.
The chart shows satisfaction level of people increases after renovation. most satisfied visitors shown by dots in the chart rose from 15 to 35 and following them shown with horizontal lines, the satisfied ones increased from 30 to 40. While the number of dissatisfied and very dissatisfied people fell from 40 to 15 and 10 to 5 respectively. Furthermore, the number of people who did not response, remained same.
Overall, It shows happiness in visitors during the year after renovation. and also an increase in number of visitors who visit Ashdown Museum after refurbishment.main features of the chart very satisfied, satisfied shown increment. while dissatisfied shows a decrease.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers the main features of the data, including the increase in visitor numbers and the shift in satisfaction levels. However, the analysis is somewhat superficial. While you correctly identify the trends, the report lacks a clear overview that synthesises the information effectively. The conclusion is repetitive and does not add value. To improve, ensure you group data logically and provide a more analytical summary of the trends rather than just listing the figures. The task is addressed, but the development of ideas is limited, which prevents a higher score.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The response is organised into paragraphs, but the structure is quite basic. The use of cohesive devices is limited and sometimes mechanical, such as the repetitive use of 'The table shows' and 'The chart shows'. There is a lack of sophisticated linking words to connect the ideas between sentences and paragraphs. For example, the final paragraph feels disjointed from the rest of the text. Improving the flow by using a wider variety of transition signals (e.g., 'consequently', 'in contrast', 'furthermore') would help the reader follow the progression of your argument more easily.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is adequate for the task but lacks variety and precision. You rely on simple terms like 'increase', 'shows', and 'happiness'. There are also some inaccuracies in word choice, such as 'furnishing' instead of 'refurbishment' or 'renovation', and 'did not response' instead of 'did not respond'. To reach a higher band, you should aim to use more precise academic vocabulary to describe trends, such as 'surged', 'plummeted', or 'remained stable', and ensure correct word forms are used throughout the report.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The response contains a mix of simple and some complex sentence structures, but there are frequent errors in grammar and punctuation. For instance, 'The table shows the number of people visits' is grammatically incorrect; it should be 'the number of people visiting'. There are also issues with sentence fragments and missing articles (e.g., 'remained same' should be 'remained the same'). While these errors do not completely impede communication, they are frequent enough to lower the score. Focusing on subject-verb agreement and article usage will significantly improve your accuracy.
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