Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-08-21
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The table illustrates the number of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and after its refurbished, while the pie charts depict the result of surveys regarding visitors during the two same period.
Overall, the number of visitors rose after refurbishment, with a significant difference between the figures before and after the refurbishment. And also visitor satisfaction improved considerably during the same period.
Regarding to the numbers of visitors before refurbishment were around 74,000 and after refurbishment the figure is 92,000 which means the figure is increased.
let's move on visitors' satisfaction level in changed after renovation. there is difference illustrates that is before renovation is figure so dissatisfied visitors is more around 40 and after renovation is figure is decreased which remain only 15. and also, before refurbishment the number of visitors remains low around 15 after renovation the number is consistent with increase which are 35. after refurbishment the number of satisfied visitors' is grow up as compared with result before refurbishment.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers the main features of the table and pie charts, providing a clear overview of the trends. You successfully identified the increase in visitor numbers and the shift in satisfaction levels. However, the analysis is somewhat superficial. For example, when discussing the satisfaction levels, you mention figures like '40' and '15' without clearly linking them to the specific categories (e.g., 'very dissatisfied'). The description of the data is occasionally imprecise, and the comparison between the two periods could be more detailed by explicitly stating the extent of the changes. To improve, ensure you clearly label the data points and provide a more structured comparison of all categories presented in the charts.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organised into paragraphs, but the flow is hindered by awkward transitions and informal phrasing, such as 'let's move on'. The use of cohesive devices is limited and sometimes mechanical, such as the repetitive use of 'and also'. The referencing is occasionally unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow the progression of ideas between the table data and the survey results. To improve, use a wider variety of linking words (e.g., 'furthermore', 'in contrast', 'consequently') and ensure that each paragraph has a clear topic sentence that guides the reader through the data analysis.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task but lacks precision and variety. You rely on basic verbs like 'is' and 'are' to describe data, and phrases like 'grow up' are not appropriate for academic writing. There are also errors in word choice and form, such as 'its refurbished' instead of 'its refurbishment' and 'the figure is increased' instead of 'the figure increased'. To achieve a higher band, focus on using more precise reporting verbs and nouns, such as 'surged', 'declined', 'proportion', and 'significant improvement', and ensure you use the correct word forms in your sentences.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains a mix of simple and some attempted complex structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. Issues include subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'the numbers of visitors... were'), incorrect preposition usage ('Regarding to'), and awkward sentence construction ('there is difference illustrates that is before renovation is figure so dissatisfied'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, with some run-on sentences and missing commas. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence structures before attempting more complex ones, and pay close attention to verb tenses and the correct use of articles and prepositions in your descriptions.
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