Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-08-21
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 6.0)
The given figures illustrates the amount of people who visits Ashdown Museum throughout the year then and after the Museum got renovated. The shown chart demonstrates the outcome of studies inquiring guests that how much satisfied they were with their visit to the museum, during these two timelines.
Overall, it can be seen that the people who visited the museum during the year after refurbishment are significantly more than the individuals who visited during the year before refurbishment.
Turning to the details, 40 percent of the people felt disappointed after seen the museum during the year before its renovation.. Furthermore, the amount of the guests who were satisfied were 10 percent below than the individuals who were disappointed. In Addition, there were only fewer people who falls into other categories like very satisfied, very dissatisfied and no response.
On the other hand, during the year after redecoration, the amount of individuals who were satisfied with the museum were 25 percent more than the people who were dissatisfied. and the ratio of satisfied people were 40 percent. whereas, the people who felt very satisfied were 35 percent. Lastly other people were only 25 percent collectively.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 6.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0
The response covers the main features of the data, including the visitor numbers and the satisfaction survey results for both periods. However, the analysis is somewhat superficial. For example, while you mention the 40 percent dissatisfaction rate before refurbishment, you do not clearly contrast this with the specific figures for the 'after' period in a way that highlights the trend effectively. The summary of the 'other' categories is vague. To reach a higher band, ensure that all data points are accurately reported and that comparisons are more analytical rather than just listing numbers.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The essay is organized into logical paragraphs, and there is a clear overall progression from the introduction to the body paragraphs. You use some cohesive devices such as 'Furthermore', 'In Addition', and 'On the other hand'. However, some of these are used mechanically or incorrectly, such as starting a sentence with 'and' or using 'Lastly other people'. The referencing is occasionally unclear, which affects the flow of information. Improving the variety and precision of your linking words would help the essay read more naturally.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The range of vocabulary is adequate for the task but lacks precision. You rely on basic phrasing like 'amount of people' (which should be 'number of people') and 'got renovated'. There are also some awkward collocations, such as 'after seen the museum' (should be 'after seeing') and 'redecoration' (which is not the most accurate term for a museum refurbishment). To improve, try to incorporate more academic vocabulary related to data description, such as 'proportion', 'significant increase', or 'fluctuation'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
There is a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but the accuracy is inconsistent. You have several grammatical errors, such as subject-verb agreement issues ('the given figures illustrates', 'the amount of the guests who were satisfied were') and incorrect verb forms ('after seen'). Punctuation is also problematic, with unnecessary periods and inconsistent capitalization. While these errors do not completely impede communication, they occur frequently enough to lower the score. Focus on subject-verb agreement and consistent verb tense usage.
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