Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-08-21
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 6.0)
The data provided shows how many people have visited Ashdown Museum and the level of satisfaction with the visit among them.
Overall, the number of visitors has increased after refurbishment significantly. The total number of people who were satisfied with museum in a certain degree has gone up by 30%, while the number of unsatisfied visitors has decreased by more than two times.
The total attendance of Ashdown Museum has risen by 18,000 people throughout the period. Among them, a third experienced satisfaction after their visit and only 15% really enjoyed it before refurbishment. A year after, the total number of satisfied visitors experienced growth by two-third from 45% to 75%, with the number of those who were just satisfied rose by 10% and those who were very satisfied by 20%.
As regards unsatisfied individuals, their percentage has fallen throughout the period. Before refurbishment, a half of visitors was not satisfied with the museum. After refurbishment, the portion of these visitors has shrinked by 30%. The number of dissatisfied visitors has fallen two times, while the share of those who were very dissatisfied has become 2,5 times less.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 6.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0
The response covers all parts of the task, including the visitor numbers and the satisfaction survey data. You have successfully identified the main trends, such as the increase in total visitors and the shift toward higher satisfaction levels post-refurbishment. However, some of the data interpretation is slightly confusing. For instance, stating that the number of satisfied visitors 'experienced growth by two-third' is mathematically unclear in the context of the provided percentages. To improve, ensure that your comparisons between the two years are precise and clearly linked to the specific data points provided in the charts. Overall, you have provided a clear summary of the main features.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5
The response is logically organized, with a clear introduction, an overview, and two body paragraphs focusing on attendance and satisfaction respectively. You use cohesive devices like 'Overall', 'As regards', and 'After refurbishment' to guide the reader. However, some transitions feel slightly mechanical, and the paragraphing could be more balanced. The progression of ideas is generally clear, but the internal cohesion within the third paragraph is slightly hampered by the confusing phrasing regarding the percentage growth. Strengthening the logical flow between sentences would help elevate this score.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'refurbishment', 'attendance', and 'satisfied'. There are some instances of slightly awkward phrasing, such as 'in a certain degree' and 'the portion of these visitors has shrinked'. The word 'shrinked' is incorrect; the past participle of 'shrink' is 'shrunk'. While you attempt to use more precise language, some word choices lack natural collocation. Expanding your range of descriptive verbs and ensuring correct verb forms will improve your lexical score.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. There are several grammatical errors, such as 'a half of visitors was' (should be 'half of the visitors were') and 'the number of those who were just satisfied rose' (which lacks a clear subject-verb agreement in the context of the sentence). Additionally, 'has become 2,5 times less' is an unnatural way to express a decrease. While these errors do not impede communication, they occur frequently enough to prevent a higher band. Focusing on subject-verb agreement and consistent tense usage will be beneficial.
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