Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-08-22
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The table illustrates the total number of guest to Ashdown Museum during year before and the year after it was refurnished. The charts demonstrate the outcome of survey asking guest satisfaction with the visit, During the same two periods. Overall, the total number of visitors during the renovation at 74,000 and after renewal visitors at 92,000. In addition two charts show the result of travelers satisfaction the satisfied people are same percentage and before renovation dissatisfied at 40% and declined at 25% at after improvements. Before the renovation the very satisfied and satisfied people are approximately same and respond visitors at 5. However the dissatisfied attendees are 40. therefore very dissatisfied at 30. Furthermore, after Modernisation the very satisfied visitors rate rose at 30 and very dissatisfied or no response customers are equally same. Moreover, The dissatisfied guest are declined at 15. The satisfied visitors high at 40 in the period.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers the main features of the table and charts, including the increase in visitor numbers and the shifts in satisfaction levels. However, the reporting of data is often unclear or inaccurate. For instance, stating 'the satisfied people are same percentage' is vague, and the description of the survey data lacks precision in comparing the two periods. The analysis is somewhat mechanical and fails to highlight the most significant trends effectively. To improve, you should focus on grouping data logically and ensuring that figures are cited accurately to support your observations, rather than simply listing numbers without clear context or comparison.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is divided into paragraphs, but the logical flow is hampered by awkward phrasing and a lack of effective cohesive devices. While some transition words like 'However' and 'Furthermore' are used, they are often placed incorrectly or do not logically connect the ideas. The referencing is sometimes confusing, such as 'respond visitors at 5', which makes it difficult for the reader to follow the progression of the argument. Improving the use of linking words and ensuring that each sentence builds clearly upon the previous one would significantly enhance the coherence of your writing.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is limited and repetitive, relying heavily on basic terms like 'people', 'visitors', and 'guest'. There are several instances of incorrect word choice, such as 'refurnished' instead of 'refurbished' and 'Modernisation' used in a context where it does not fit well. Additionally, the phrasing 'equally same' is redundant. To reach a higher band, you should aim to use a wider range of vocabulary related to data description, such as 'proportion', 'fluctuation', 'significant', and 'trend', and ensure that your word choices are precise and appropriate for an academic report.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. There are issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'The dissatisfied guest are declined'), incorrect preposition usage (e.g., 'rose at 30'), and missing articles. The sentence structures are mostly simple, and attempts at more complex sentences often result in errors, such as the run-on sentences in the second paragraph. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, ensuring correct verb tenses, and proofreading for common errors like pluralization and article usage. Increasing the variety of your sentence structures will also help improve your score.
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