Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-08-22

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The given charts illustrates the information regarding numbers of tourist person visited Ashdown museum before and after renovation and also shows the satisfaction ratio of visitors.

overall, it is clearly noticable that after the renovation of museum exponential surge in the numbers of visitors.

to commence with, before renovation dissatisfied persons accounted for the highest proportion at approximately 40%, followed by satisfied visitors at 30%. meanwhile, very satisfies is accounted for 15% and very dissatisfied occupy 10%. other category , no response was at the lowest point represented only 5%.

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AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response is significantly under the 150-word minimum requirement, which severely impacts the score. Because the text is incomplete, it fails to report on the second year (after renovation) or make necessary comparisons between the two periods. The overview is present but lacks detail. To improve, you must ensure you cover all parts of the prompt, including the data for both years and a clear comparison of the trends. You need to expand your analysis to meet the word count, ensuring you provide a comprehensive summary of the main features shown in the charts.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The response shows some attempt at organization with an introduction and an overview. However, the paragraphing is underdeveloped due to the lack of content. The use of cohesive devices is limited and somewhat mechanical, such as 'to commence with' and 'meanwhile'. The logical progression is interrupted because the response stops abruptly before completing the analysis. To improve, focus on using a wider range of linking words to connect your ideas more fluidly and ensure each paragraph has a clear purpose, leading to a logical conclusion.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is basic and contains several inaccuracies, such as 'tourist person' instead of 'tourists' or 'visitor numbers', and 'very satisfies' instead of 'very satisfied'. The range of vocabulary is limited, which restricts your ability to describe the data precisely. To improve, try to incorporate more specific academic vocabulary related to data description, such as 'proportion', 'fluctuation', or 'significant increase'. Avoid repetitive phrasing and focus on using correct word forms and collocations to convey your meaning more accurately.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the short text. Examples include 'The given charts illustrates' (subject-verb agreement error), 'exponential surge in the numbers' (missing verb), and 'very dissatisfied occupy' (tense inconsistency). The sentence structures are simple and lack the complexity required for higher bands. To improve, focus on subject-verb agreement, correct verb tenses when describing past data, and practice using a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. Proofreading for basic errors like missing articles and incorrect plurals will also help raise your score.

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