Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-08-22
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
THE TABLE ILLUSTRATE ABOUT THE NUMBER OF VISITORS TO ASHDOWN MUSEUM YEAR BACK AND AFTER REFURBISHED. WHILE THE CHATRS REPRESENT THE OUT COME OF SURVEYS ASKING TOURISTS HOW REWIND THEY WERE WITH THEIR VISIT , IN THE SAME GIVEN TIMES.
OVERALL, THE TABLE DEMONSTRATES THAT THE HIGHEST NUMBER OF VISITORS WERE SEEN AFTER THE RENOVATION. MEANWHILE THE CHARTS ALSO DEPIC THAT VISITORS WERE FULLY SAITSFIED AFTER THE REFURBISHMENT.
ON THE ONE HAND , THE TABLES EXAMPLFIES THAT THE NUMBER OF PEOPLE ROSE AFTER THE OVERHAUL THAT IS 92000. ALTHOUGH THE TRAVELERS WAS NOT MUCH SATISFIED BEFORE REMODELLING
ON THE OTHER HAND THE CHARTS ILLUSTRATE THAT THE GUESTS WERE MORE PLEASED WITH THE RENOVATION . WE CAN SEE THE NUMBER PEPOLE HAS ROSE AFTER THE RENOVATION. THE INTERESTING POINT IS THAT THE PEOPLE WHO HAVE NOT GIVEN RESPOND REMAINED SAME IN BOTHE THE PERIOD THAT IS 5% . WHILE THE DISSATISFIED LEVEL DROP FROM 40% TO 15% WHICH IS THE GOOD ADVANTAGE FOR THE MUSUEM
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers the main features of the data, such as the increase in visitor numbers and the shift in satisfaction levels. However, the analysis is somewhat superficial and lacks precision. For example, stating 'the number of people rose... that is 92000' is unclear as it does not specify if this is the total or the increase. The comparison between the two periods is attempted, but the lack of accurate data reporting hinders the clarity of the summary. To improve, ensure that all figures are clearly linked to their respective categories and that the overview provides a more comprehensive summary of the trends observed in both the table and the charts.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or inaccurate, such as the repetitive use of 'On the one hand' and 'On the other hand' to introduce sections that do not necessarily contrast in the way these phrases imply. Additionally, some sentences are disjointed, and the logical flow between ideas is occasionally interrupted by grammatical errors. Improving the variety and accuracy of linking words would help the ideas progress more smoothly throughout the response.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is limited and contains several spelling errors, such as 'CHATRS' for charts, 'DEPIC' for depict, 'SAITSFIED' for satisfied, and 'MUSUEM' for museum. There is also an issue with word choice, such as using 'rewind' instead of 'satisfied' and 'overhaul' in a context that is slightly unnatural. While the student attempts to use topic-specific vocabulary like 'renovation' and 'refurbishment', the frequent errors in spelling and word formation impede the overall quality of the writing. A wider range of vocabulary and more attention to accurate spelling are required for a higher score.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response relies on a mix of simple and some attempted complex structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors throughout. Examples include 'The table illustrate' (subject-verb agreement), 'travelers was not much satisfied' (subject-verb agreement and incorrect quantifier), and 'number pepole has rose' (incorrect verb form). Punctuation is also inconsistent, with unnecessary spaces before commas. These errors are frequent and occasionally make the meaning difficult to follow. To improve, focus on basic subject-verb agreement, correct verb tenses, and consistent sentence construction.
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