Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-08-23
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The table illustrate the numbers of visitors visiting to Ashdown museum during the year before and the year after it is reconstructed.
Overall, there is rise of visitors is observed at Ashdown museum after it is refurbished. Firstly people opinion towards dissatisfied carries the highest shared but after refurbishment the visitors satisfaction level increased.
To begins with, year before refurbishment there are only 74000 visitors visit museum yearly. The visitors who shared there opinion is recorded and there are majority of visitors who are dissatisfied at 40% and there are some people which no response which are at 5%
Moreover, year after reconstruction there is a significant growth noted at 92000 visitors yearly. People with positive response is at 40% and very satisfied visitors are also increased over the time. Additionally individuals with no opinion remains unchanged and people which very dissatisfied are on the same scale at 5% respectively.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers the main features of the table and charts, identifying the increase in visitor numbers and the shift in satisfaction levels. However, the reporting of data is inconsistent and lacks precision. For example, while you mention '40%' for dissatisfaction, you fail to clearly contrast this with the 'very satisfied' or 'satisfied' categories in a way that fully highlights the trends. The overview is present but could be more analytical by synthesizing the relationship between the refurbishment and the change in visitor sentiment. Some data points are mentioned, but the comparison between the two years is underdeveloped.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organized into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or inaccurate, such as 'To begins with' and 'Moreover'. The progression of ideas is sometimes disjointed, particularly in the transition between the table data and the survey data. Referencing is occasionally unclear, making it difficult to track which specific data point belongs to which category. While there is an attempt at logical sequencing, the lack of sophisticated linking words limits the flow of the response.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task but lacks the precision required for a higher band. There are several instances of awkward word choice and collocation errors, such as 'people opinion towards dissatisfied' and 'on the same scale'. You rely on basic descriptors like 'growth' and 'increased' rather than more varied academic vocabulary. Spelling and word-form errors, such as 'illustrate' (should be 'illustrates') and 'reconstructed' (refurbished is more accurate in this context), are noticeable and occasionally impede the clarity of the information provided.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that affect readability. Subject-verb agreement is a recurring issue, for example, 'The table illustrate' and 'there is rise of visitors'. There are also errors with articles and prepositions, such as 'visit museum' instead of 'visit the museum'. While the meaning is generally clear, the high frequency of these errors means that the response does not demonstrate the control required for a higher band. Punctuation is also inconsistent throughout the text.
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