Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-08-23
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The given pie chart illustrates the number of visitors to Ashdown museum during the year before and later refurbished. The chart show the total number of visitors to Ashdown museum.
To commence with, it is noticeable that first of all the total visitors at 74,000 before refurbishment and 92,000 after refurbishment. After that, the visitors very satisfied at 15 visitors in year before and 35 visitors in after year refurbishment. Moreover, satisfied visitors in before year at 30 and 40 in after year refurbishment. However, dissatisfied visitors in year before and after year at 40 and 15 visitors and very dissatisfied at 10 and 5 before and after year visitors. Finally, in the no response visitors at 5 in both year before and after year.
Overall, it becomes apparent that highest satisfied visitors in year after and nobody response in the both year. The total number of visitors very low in before compared to after year.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response covers the main features of the data, such as the total visitor numbers and the shift in satisfaction levels. However, the presentation of the data is problematic. You have listed figures (e.g., '15 visitors', '30 and 40') without clarifying that these represent percentages from the survey charts, which leads to factual inaccuracies. Furthermore, the description of the data is quite mechanical and lacks a clear analytical focus. To improve, ensure you distinguish between absolute numbers (total visitors) and proportions (satisfaction percentages) and group the data more logically to highlight trends rather than just listing individual figures.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organised into paragraphs, which is a positive step. However, the progression of ideas is somewhat disjointed. The use of cohesive devices is limited and occasionally repetitive or unnatural, such as 'To commence with' and 'After that'. The referencing is also unclear at times, particularly when discussing the survey results. While the overall structure is logical, the lack of sophisticated linking words and the somewhat mechanical flow of sentences limit the coherence of the response. Improving the variety of transition signals and ensuring smoother transitions between sentences would enhance the overall readability.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is quite basic and repetitive. You frequently use the same phrases, such as 'year before and after year' and 'visitors'. There is a lack of variety in reporting verbs or descriptive language. For instance, instead of repeating 'visitors', you could use terms like 'attendees', 'individuals', or 'respondents'. Additionally, there are errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'later refurbished' instead of 'after refurbishment'. To reach a higher band, you should aim to use a wider range of vocabulary, including synonyms and more precise terminology related to data description.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. There are issues with sentence structure, such as 'The chart show the total number' (subject-verb agreement) and 'the visitors very satisfied at 15 visitors' (missing verb). Many sentences are simple, and there is a lack of complex structures. Punctuation is generally functional, but the overall control of grammar is weak. To improve, focus on basic sentence construction, ensuring that every sentence has a clear subject and a main verb, and work on using a mix of simple and complex sentence forms accurately.
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