Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-08-24

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

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Task 1

The given table illustrates how many tourists visited Ashdown Museum during the year before and after it was renovated. The pie charts further depicts the information about the outcomes of surveys which were hold to enquire visitors how pleased they were with their visit, during the given time period.

After analyzing the table charts, it is clear that 74,000 tourists reached the Ashdown Museum during the year before its renovation, while the numbers was escalated to 92,000 for those who visited this museum after its refurbishment.

Further the pie charts collate that the visitors who were very satisfied with the results of surveys was 15 in the year before refurbishment, while it was increased by 20 in the years after refurbishment. Meantime, the results of surveys of tourists who were satisfied was 30 in the former year, whereas, it rose by one in ten in the latter year. In contrast, there was a difference of 25 visitors who were totally dissatisfied with the outcomes during the both years. However, the results also faced a lot of dissatisfaction. In the first year, it was from 10 visitors, while it drop to 5 in the latter year. Furthermore, there was a negligible difference noted down in no response from visitors in both the years and it remain stable at 5.

Overall, it is clear that maximum number of people was dissatisfied with the results of surveys before refurbishment whilst minimum number of people were very dissatisfied with the results after refurbishment.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response covers all parts of the task by summarizing the visitor numbers and the survey results. You successfully identified the main trends, such as the increase in total visitors and the shifts in satisfaction levels. However, the analysis of the pie chart data is slightly confusing. For instance, stating that the number of very satisfied visitors 'was 15' is unclear because the data represents percentages, not raw numbers. You should clarify that these figures refer to percentages. Additionally, the overall summary at the end is slightly inaccurate, as it misinterprets the data regarding 'dissatisfied' versus 'very dissatisfied' categories. More precise reporting of the data points would improve the clarity of your comparisons.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is organized into logical paragraphs, with an introduction, body paragraphs for the table and charts, and a concluding summary. You use some cohesive devices like 'further', 'in contrast', and 'overall' to link ideas. However, the flow is occasionally hindered by mechanical phrasing, such as 'After analyzing the table charts' and 'the results of surveys of tourists who were satisfied was 30'. The referencing is sometimes unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow the comparison between the two years. Improving the variety of linking words and ensuring that pronouns clearly refer back to the correct data points would enhance the coherence of your writing.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'refurbished', 'renovated', 'negligible', and 'stable'. However, there are several instances of awkward word choice and collocation errors, such as 'the numbers was escalated' (should be 'the number increased') and 'surveys which were hold' (should be 'held'). You also tend to repeat the phrase 'results of surveys' frequently. To reach a higher band, focus on using more precise academic vocabulary and ensure that your collocations are natural. For example, instead of saying 'the numbers was escalated', use 'the figure rose' or 'there was an increase in the number of visitors'.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While you attempt to use complex sentences, there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede the flow, such as subject-verb agreement issues ('the numbers was escalated', 'the visitors... was 15') and incorrect verb forms ('surveys which were hold'). Punctuation is generally acceptable, but there are some issues with sentence construction that make certain parts of the analysis difficult to parse. To improve, focus on subject-verb agreement and ensure that your verb tenses are consistent when describing past data. Reducing these frequent errors will help you achieve a higher score.

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