Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-08-25
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The table describes the number of visitors to Ashdown museum, measured in time period of before and after year. While pie chart illustrates the outcomes of the visitors satisfaction on different modes.
Overall, the visitors was increased after the refurbishment, meanwhile in charts dissatisfaction has the great figure, and the lowest is no response on both charts.
The total number of visitors before the year refurbishment count reached to 74,000. on the other hand the dissatisfied in 40%, and the least was recorded in no response. the satisfaction took the second place of 30%.
when compared to very dissatisfied very satisfied is rose to 5%.
Further more, 92,000 visitors were recorded after the year. the satisfied was sour to 40% and become the hieghest percentage. very sisatisfation and no response share the same percentage of 5% and beacme the lowest. the very satisfied became the seco
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, which significantly impacts the task achievement. While you have identified the main features of the table and charts, the analysis is incomplete, particularly because the response ends abruptly mid-sentence. You have attempted to compare the data, but the lack of sufficient length means that the overview and the supporting details are not fully developed. To improve, ensure you complete your sentences and provide a more thorough comparison of the data points between the two periods to fully address all parts of the prompt.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay has a basic structure with an introduction, overview, and body paragraphs. However, the progression of ideas is hindered by the incomplete nature of the text. Cohesive devices are used, such as 'on the other hand' and 'further more', but they are sometimes used incorrectly or with awkward punctuation. Paragraphing is present but the final paragraph is cut off, which disrupts the logical flow of the response. To improve, focus on using transition signals more naturally and ensure that each paragraph has a clear, finished thought.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The range of vocabulary is limited and there are several errors in word choice and spelling, such as 'sour' instead of 'soared', 'hieghest', and 'sisatisfation'. These errors occasionally make it difficult for the reader to follow the intended meaning. You rely on basic descriptors like 'great figure' and 'recorded'. To reach a higher band, you should aim to use more precise vocabulary related to data trends, such as 'increased significantly', 'the majority', or 'a substantial proportion', and pay closer attention to spelling and accurate word forms.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors, including subject-verb agreement issues ('the visitors was increased', 'the satisfied was sour') and incorrect sentence structures. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with missing capital letters at the start of sentences and misused periods. While you attempt some complex ideas, the lack of control over basic grammar and the incomplete final sentence significantly reduce the clarity of the writing. Focus on mastering simple sentence structures before attempting more complex ones, and ensure you proofread for basic errors like verb tense and subject-verb agreement.
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