Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-08-25

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The pie table shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the one year before and after the refurbishment.

Overall, museum visitors rapidly increased after the refurbishment of the museum. In addition, the very satisfied visitor's ratio also increased gradually.

Before refurbishment, Ashdown Museum depends on just 74000 visitor including 15 percent very satisfied and 30 percent satisfied. Before the renovation of the museum around 40 percent visitors were dissatisfied, and 10 percent very dissatisfied and no response by only 5 percent.

After the refurbishment of the museum visitors ratio increased gradually from 74000 to 92000, which was very appreciated growth in one year only. They increased very satisfied visitors doubled from 15 to 30, and dissatisfied ratio rapidly decline 40 to 15. But no response remain same on just 5 percent including 5 percent of very dissatisfied. It was considered a very good growth result and the renovation of the museum.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response covers the main features of the data, including the increase in visitor numbers and the shift in satisfaction levels. However, the analysis is somewhat superficial. While you mention the increase from 74,000 to 92,000, the description of the survey data is slightly confusing, particularly the claim that 'no response' remained the same at 5% while also mentioning 5% for 'very dissatisfied'. The data interpretation lacks precision in comparing the two periods effectively. To reach a higher band, ensure that all data points are clearly linked to the correct categories and that the overview provides a more comprehensive summary of the trends observed.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is organized into logical paragraphs, with an introduction, an overview, and body paragraphs detailing the data. There is a clear progression of ideas from the general visitor numbers to the specific satisfaction ratings. However, the use of cohesive devices is somewhat mechanical and repetitive (e.g., 'Before refurbishment', 'After the refurbishment'). Some transitions between sentences feel abrupt, and the referencing is occasionally unclear, such as the final sentence which lacks a clear connection to the preceding data analysis. Improving the variety of linking words would enhance the flow of the response.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The vocabulary is adequate for the task but lacks the precision and range required for higher bands. You use some relevant terms like 'refurbishment', 'renovation', and 'dissatisfied', but there are issues with word choice and collocation, such as 'very appreciated growth' and 'visitor's ratio'. The phrasing is often simplistic, and there is a reliance on basic descriptors. To improve, focus on using more sophisticated collocations and precise terminology for describing statistical changes, such as 'a significant rise' or 'a marked improvement' rather than 'very good growth'.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. Examples include 'Ashdown Museum depends on just 74000 visitor' (subject-verb agreement and pluralization), 'dissatisfied ratio rapidly decline' (tense inconsistency), and 'no response remain same' (missing auxiliary verb). Punctuation is generally functional, but the sentence structure often feels clunky. To improve, focus on subject-verb agreement, consistent tense usage when describing past data, and ensuring that complex sentences are constructed with correct grammatical markers.

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