Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-08-25

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

This content about the Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished.

First of all, we check the period of visitors before the refurbished. The number of visitors before refurbished is 74,000. There are 15% peoples are very satisfied and 30% peoples are only satisfied. There are 40% peoples that are very dissatisfied and 10% peoples are very dissatisfied. There are 5% peoples that do not give the response. There are mostly visitors that dissatisfied by Ashdown Museum before the refurbished.

Secondly, We check the period of visitors after the refurbished. The number of visitors after refurbished is 92,000. There are 35% peoples that very satisfied from the Museum and 40% peoples that are only satisfied. There are also 15% peoples that are dissatisfied and 5% peoples are very dissatisfied. There are 5% peoples that do not give any response. There are mostly visitors that are satisfied by the Ashdown Museum after the refurbished.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The response addresses the task by identifying the main features of the data, such as the increase in visitor numbers and the shift in satisfaction levels. However, the report is somewhat mechanical, listing percentages for each category rather than synthesizing the information effectively. The analysis is accurate regarding the figures, but it lacks a clear overview or a summary of the most significant trends. To improve, you should group the data more logically and highlight the most striking changes, such as the significant improvement in visitor satisfaction post-refurbishment, rather than simply listing the data point by point.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The response is organized into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is repetitive and somewhat simplistic, relying heavily on phrases like 'There are' and 'Secondly'. The progression of ideas is clear, but the lack of varied linking words makes the writing feel disjointed. To improve, try using a wider range of cohesive devices such as 'consequently', 'in contrast', or 'whereas' to connect your ideas more fluidly and show the relationship between the two time periods more effectively.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The vocabulary is adequate for the task but lacks variety and precision. You frequently use the word 'peoples', which is grammatically incorrect in this context (the plural of 'person' is 'people'). Additionally, the repetition of 'refurbished' and 'satisfied' limits the lexical range. To reach a higher band, you should incorporate more varied vocabulary to describe trends and data, such as 'experienced an increase', 'the majority of respondents', or 'a significant shift in sentiment'. Avoid using 'peoples' when referring to a group of individuals.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The response relies heavily on simple sentence structures. There are frequent grammatical errors, particularly with subject-verb agreement and the misuse of 'peoples'. For example, '15% peoples are very satisfied' should be '15% of people were very satisfied'. The use of articles and prepositions is also inconsistent. While the meaning is generally clear, the high frequency of basic errors and the lack of complex sentence structures limit the score. Focus on mastering basic sentence construction and ensuring correct pluralization before attempting more complex grammatical forms.

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