Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-08-26

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The table gives information about the total number of visits to Ashdown Museum when it was not yet developed and after its development. The pie charts on the other hard, compares the results of the satisfaction survey given to the visitors for both time frame.

Overall, it can be seen that there was a clear increase in the number of visits after Ashdown Museum's development. These refurbishment clearly helped increase the satisfaction rate for the visitors as per the survey results, proving that it was a good decision to refurbish.

During the year before the refurbishment happens, the total number of visitors are accounted only to 74,000. This number significantly increased to 92,000 visitors after the development of the museum.

Regarding the survey, the number of the very satisfied visitors reached to 35% after refurshbishment, a significant development 15% before development whereas the percentage of the satisfied visitor had also improved from 30% to 40%. When it comes to dissatisfaction rate, there is a dramatic change from 40% dissatisfied visitors to 15%. Very dissattisfied survey answers accounted 5% after from 10% while the non respondents remained at 5%.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5

The response covers all parts of the task, providing a clear summary of the data. You successfully identified the main features, such as the increase in visitor numbers and the shift in satisfaction levels. The comparison between the two periods is well-integrated. To reach a higher band, ensure that all data points are described with complete accuracy; for instance, you mentioned '35% after refurbishment' compared to '15% before', which is accurate, but ensure your overview remains strictly analytical rather than evaluative (e.g., avoiding the phrase 'proving that it was a good decision'). Overall, the information is well-selected and presented clearly.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The response is logically organized with a clear introduction, overview, and body paragraphs. You use cohesive devices such as 'Overall', 'During the year before', and 'Regarding the survey' to guide the reader. However, some transitions are slightly mechanical, and there are minor issues with referencing, such as 'on the other hard' (a typo for 'hand'). Paragraphing is used appropriately to separate the visitor numbers from the survey results. To improve, focus on using a wider variety of linking words to create a more natural flow between sentences.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'refurbishment', 'significantly increased', and 'dissatisfaction rate'. There are some spelling errors, such as 'refurshbishment', 'dissattisfied', and 'hard' instead of 'hand'. While these do not impede communication, they prevent a higher score. You attempt to use less common vocabulary, but some collocations are slightly awkward, such as 'accounted only to' (should be 'accounted for'). Increasing your precision with word choice and ensuring accurate spelling will help elevate your score in this criterion.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. There are several grammatical errors, such as subject-verb agreement issues ('the total number of visitors are accounted') and preposition errors ('reached to 35%'). Additionally, there are tense inconsistencies, such as 'before the refurbishment happens' (should be 'happened'). While these errors are noticeable, they do not prevent the reader from understanding the main points. To improve, focus on subject-verb agreement and consistent tense usage when describing past data.

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