Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-08-27
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
the table illustrates the amount of tourist to Ashdown Museum before and after year.
the pie charts compares the people of went to Ashdown museum before the year of satisfied and after of the year
overall, the tourist of Ashdown the total numbers of individual was 74000 before the year of refurbishment and after the year it was rise to 92000 therefore there a huge difference found us it was 18000 increased
in contrast, before the year very satisfied was 15 % and after rise to 35% and before the year satisfied was 30% after reached to 35 % and dissatisfied was 40 % and after that it was down to 15% and before the year of refurbishment the individual very dissatisfied percentage was 10 % and after the year of very dissatisfied individual percentage was down to 5 % and no response will be come the and both of them before the year and after the year therefore it was a total explanation.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers the main features of the table and charts, identifying the increase in visitor numbers and the shifts in satisfaction levels. However, the analysis is somewhat mechanical, simply listing figures rather than synthesizing the data effectively. The overview is present but lacks clarity due to grammatical issues. While all parts of the task are addressed, the lack of sophisticated comparison and the reliance on a list-like structure limits the development of the response. To improve, focus on grouping data points logically and using more analytical language to describe trends rather than just stating the numbers.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The response is organized into paragraphs, but the logical flow is hindered by repetitive sentence structures and a lack of varied cohesive devices. The use of 'before the year' and 'after the year' is repetitive and makes the text feel disjointed. Transitions between sentences are often missing or awkward, such as 'therefore there a huge difference found us'. While the overall progression is discernible, the lack of sophisticated linking words makes the writing feel mechanical. Improving the use of referencing and transition signals would significantly enhance the readability and logical flow of the report.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is quite limited and repetitive. There are frequent errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'amount of tourist' instead of 'number of tourists' and 'it was rise to' instead of 'it rose to'. The student relies on basic terminology and struggles to use precise language to describe statistical changes. There is no attempt to use less common lexical items. To reach a higher band, you should expand your range of vocabulary to include synonyms for 'increase' and 'decrease' and focus on using nouns and verbs correctly in a statistical context.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede communication. There are significant issues with verb tense consistency, subject-verb agreement, and sentence structure. For example, 'the pie charts compares' should be 'the pie charts compare', and 'no response will be come the' is unintelligible. The range of structures is very limited, consisting mostly of simple sentences with errors. There is a lack of complex sentence structures, and punctuation is inconsistent. Focusing on basic sentence construction and proofreading for subject-verb agreement would be a good starting point for improvement.
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