Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-08-27
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
Before refurbished mesum there was very few number of people who visits the place.like if we see it through a circular chart the reading is in this way 15 per people are very satisfied,30 per are only satisfied,40 per are not well satisfied ,10 are the those who are completely dissatisfied and there are 5 percent people who not respond before the mesum is refurbishment.overall the people's who came in the museum before refurbishment is 74000 which show a strong need of refurbishment.
After the refurbishment the scenario is very different there is very fine growth in visitors.According to circular chart the slices of people's responses is in that the 35 per people's slice on chart is showing the response which are very satisfied,40 percent people are satisfied which huge number as compare to last chart,15 per are not satisfied,5 percent is totally not satisfied and the 5 per who not responded.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response addresses the task by comparing visitor numbers and satisfaction levels. However, the analysis is superficial. While you mention the total visitor numbers (74,000) and some percentages, you fail to provide the corresponding figure for the year after refurbishment, which is a key comparison point. The description of the charts is repetitive and lacks a clear overview or summary of the main trends. To improve, ensure you explicitly state the key changes (e.g., the increase in visitor numbers and the shift toward higher satisfaction) and provide specific data points for both years to support your claims.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is divided into two paragraphs, which helps structure the information chronologically. However, the flow of ideas is hindered by a lack of cohesive devices. Phrases like 'like if we see it through a circular chart' are informal and do not effectively link ideas. The progression of information within paragraphs is somewhat mechanical, relying on simple listing rather than comparing or contrasting data. Using linking words such as 'in contrast,' 'furthermore,' or 'consequently' would help guide the reader through your analysis more effectively.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is limited and repetitive. You frequently use 'per' instead of 'percent' and 'people's' incorrectly. There are also issues with word choice, such as 'very fine growth' and 'not well satisfied,' which are not standard academic collocations. To reach a higher band, you should aim for more precise terminology to describe data, such as 'significant increase,' 'a substantial proportion,' or 'the majority of respondents.' Additionally, ensure you use the correct terminology for the charts, such as 'pie chart' instead of 'circular chart.'
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text, including subject-verb agreement issues ('there was very few number,' 'people who visits') and incorrect sentence structure. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with missing spaces after commas and periods. The range of structures is limited to simple sentences, and attempts at more complex descriptions are often inaccurate. To improve, focus on basic sentence construction, ensuring that subjects and verbs agree, and practice using articles and prepositions correctly. Proofreading for basic errors like 'mesum' (museum) and 'per' (percent) is essential.
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