Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-08-27
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
the given table illustrates the number of visitors to Ashdown museum in two contrasting years before and after refurbishment.overall,the percentage of visitors after refurbishment is higher then the amount of visitors before renovation.The highest rate calculated before renovation was the dissatisfaction rate among visitors whereas,after renovation the highest percentage is shown for satisfaction
In comparison,only 15 percent visitors were very pleased by the year before renovation on the other hand, 35 percent tourist were highly satisfied by the museum after renovation but 40 percent guest showed satisfaction as compared to the visitors before refurbishment that was only 10 percent. however,the dissatisfaction from the year before renovation decreases to only 15 percent as compared to 40 percent before.the number of guest that were highly dissatisfied were also fall to only 5 percent in compare to the year before.whereas,the amount of visitors that showed no response in the before and after of museum were the same.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers the main features of the data, including the visitor numbers and the shifts in satisfaction levels. However, the report lacks precision. For instance, the initial statement mentions the number of visitors is higher after refurbishment, but the table shows a decrease (74,000 to 92,000 is not the correct interpretation of the data provided). Furthermore, the comparison of satisfaction percentages is somewhat confusingly presented, making it difficult for the reader to follow the trends accurately. To improve, ensure that data points are cited precisely and that the overall summary accurately reflects the provided figures rather than making generalisations that contradict the data.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is organised into two paragraphs, but the logical flow is hindered by mechanical transitions and poor sentence structure. While there is an attempt to use cohesive devices like 'in comparison' and 'however', they are often used incorrectly or placed awkwardly within sentences. The paragraphing is insufficient; the overview should be clearly separated from the detailed body paragraphs to improve readability. Additionally, the lack of proper punctuation, such as spaces after commas and periods, makes the text feel disjointed and difficult to follow, which negatively impacts the overall coherence of the response.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary range is limited and repetitive. Words like 'visitors', 'renovation', and 'percentage' are used frequently without much variation. There are also issues with word choice and collocation, such as 'the amount of visitors' (should be 'number of visitors') and 'the number of guest that were highly dissatisfied were also fall' (grammatically incorrect and imprecise). To reach a higher band, you should aim to use a wider range of synonyms and more precise academic vocabulary to describe trends, such as 'fluctuated', 'remained stable', or 'experienced a significant decline'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede communication. There are consistent issues with subject-verb agreement, such as 'the number of guest... were also fall' and 'the dissatisfaction... decreases'. Punctuation is a significant weakness, with many missing spaces after punctuation marks, which is a basic error. The sentence structures are mostly simple or contain errors when attempting complexity. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, ensuring correct verb tenses, and paying closer attention to standard punctuation rules to ensure the writing is professional and error-free.
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