Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-08-28
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
The table chart illustrates,the numbers of tourists tp Ashdom Meseum during the year while before the year after refurbished.the chart given the result of survey vistory are happy for visit two time cycles
In the year before developed 40%dissatisfied inaddition second growth satisfied people more public very satisfied 15% then people 10%is very dissatisfied and 5%tourist no response total visiotors number 74,000 visitors come.
In contrast that after refurbishment 40%visitors satisfied or 35%tourist really very satisfied or 15%people are very dissatisified inaddition other persons 5%very dissatisfied and other tourist have no more response
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, reaching only 93 words. This significantly impacts the ability to fully address the task. While the student attempts to report some data from the table and charts, the information is presented in a fragmented and confusing manner. Key features, such as the total visitor numbers and the shifts in satisfaction levels, are mentioned but lack the necessary detail, comparison, and analysis required for an Academic Task 1 response. The failure to reach the word count and the lack of a clear, comprehensive overview result in a low score for this criterion.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The response lacks logical organization and progression. While there is an attempt at paragraphing, the sentences within the paragraphs are disjointed and difficult to follow. Cohesive devices are either missing or used incorrectly, such as the repetitive and misused 'inaddition'. The lack of clear transitions between the data points makes it difficult for the reader to understand the relationship between the figures before and after the refurbishment. The overall structure is mechanical and fails to guide the reader through the information effectively.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
The vocabulary is very limited and repetitive, often relying on basic terms like 'people', 'tourist', and 'visitors'. There are numerous spelling errors, such as 'tp' for 'to', 'Ashdom Meseum' for 'Ashdown Museum', and 'vistory' for 'visitors'. The student struggles to use precise terminology to describe the data, leading to awkward phrasing like 'two time cycles' and 'no more response'. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to convey the information accurately or with any degree of sophistication, which severely limits the clarity of the report.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The grammatical control is weak, with frequent errors that impede communication. There are significant issues with sentence structure, including run-on sentences and fragments. Punctuation is largely ignored or used incorrectly, such as the comma placement in 'illustrates,the'. Verb tenses are inconsistent and often incorrect, for example, 'year while before the year after refurbished'. The student relies on simple sentence structures, and even these contain basic errors in subject-verb agreement and word order. The frequency of these errors makes the text difficult to read and understand.
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