Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-08-28
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The table presents the amount of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts illustrates the result of analysts asking visitors how felt they were belong their visit during the similar two periods.
Overall, the maximum amount of visitors visit during the year after refurbishment. In addition no response by the visitors in the both refurbishment was similar. Also the majority of the visitors are dissatisfied in the previous year and satisfied in the after year. Very dissatisfied was fell slighted in after year compared with previous year result of surveys.
Firstly the entire number of visitors to Ashdown museum was the huge amount participated at 92,000 visitors also before refurbishment visit at 72,000 visitors. On the other hand the analyzation of result maximum is the before and after was dissatisfied and opposite satisfied at 40percent and same as well as 40 percent.Morever no response category was the similar in both before and after the year of refurbishment.
In addition very dissatisfied negative reported by the before year at 10 percent in contrast down slighted in after refurbishment at 5%.However very satisfied feedback was less at 15 percent eventhough improved postive at 35% behalf in the year after refurbishment.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response covers the main features of the data, such as the increase in total visitor numbers and the shift in satisfaction levels. However, the analysis is often unclear or inaccurate. For instance, the statement that 'no response by the visitors in the both refurbishment was similar' is confusing, and the description of the percentages is difficult to follow. While the main trends are identified, the lack of clarity in reporting the data prevents a higher score. To improve, ensure that comparisons are precise and that the data points are clearly linked to the categories provided in the charts.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or inaccurate, such as 'On the other hand the analyzation of result maximum is the before and after'. The progression of ideas is frequently interrupted by awkward phrasing and unclear referencing, making it difficult to follow the logical flow of the argument. Improving the use of linking words and ensuring that each sentence clearly connects to the previous one will significantly enhance the coherence of your writing.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is limited and often used incorrectly, which occasionally impedes communication. Examples include 'analyzation of result', 'very dissatisfied was fell slighted', and 'improved postive at 35% behalf'. These errors indicate a lack of control over word choice and collocation. While you attempt to use some topic-specific vocabulary, the frequent misuse of basic terms and grammatical forms of words limits the range. Focus on learning the correct word forms (e.g., 'analysis' instead of 'analyzation') and using vocabulary in contextually appropriate ways.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
There is a limited range of grammatical structures, and the response contains frequent errors that often cause difficulty for the reader. Many sentences are poorly constructed, such as 'The charts illustrates the result of analysts asking visitors how felt they were belong their visit'. Subject-verb agreement errors (e.g., 'charts illustrates') and incorrect word order are common. While the meaning can usually be inferred, the high frequency of errors in basic sentence structures prevents a higher score. You should focus on mastering simple sentence patterns before attempting more complex structures.
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